for Confused Musings of a Girl Who Gets Shrek2/17/2009 c2 Lord Stephen
Yeah sorry about that cup of glee and sparkles. Maybe I went a little over the top but it was really good. I have only been on fictionpress a bit over a week but you were the best I had read thus far. I also fixed the word block thing, and organized my story into chapters. The comma issue I have not though. It was republished for a fresh start. Thanks for reading and good luck. : D
Yeah sorry about that cup of glee and sparkles. Maybe I went a little over the top but it was really good. I have only been on fictionpress a bit over a week but you were the best I had read thus far. I also fixed the word block thing, and organized my story into chapters. The comma issue I have not though. It was republished for a fresh start. Thanks for reading and good luck. : D
2/15/2009 c1 Lord Stephen
I may give you the best review you have ever gotten. I have to say it is extraordinary. It is as if I just unearthed a hidden jewel. The narrative is so great in nearly every aspect. This is the first story that instantly got me addicted to it I have ever read on or . The description and believable first person point of view, is great. Just the way you tell it...and everything. Indeed this is the best story I have ever read in the two websites. A 9 out of 10 stars.
I may give you the best review you have ever gotten. I have to say it is extraordinary. It is as if I just unearthed a hidden jewel. The narrative is so great in nearly every aspect. This is the first story that instantly got me addicted to it I have ever read on or . The description and believable first person point of view, is great. Just the way you tell it...and everything. Indeed this is the best story I have ever read in the two websites. A 9 out of 10 stars.
1/1/2009 c13 
8Written
what a sweet ending! LOVE when steven starts walking away hehe. this piece was very touching. well done!
8Writtenwhat a sweet ending! LOVE when steven starts walking away hehe. this piece was very touching. well done!
1/1/2009 c6 Written
I think the length and everything works with this story. everything really works. I love how bits and pieces of her story are falling together for me.
I think the length and everything works with this story. everything really works. I love how bits and pieces of her story are falling together for me.
1/1/2009 c4 Written
ouch! haha 'devon'. wow.
this piece is great. the writing is sharpsharpsharp and still quite subtle. well done so far!
ouch! haha 'devon'. wow.
this piece is great. the writing is sharpsharpsharp and still quite subtle. well done so far!
1/1/2009 c13 3The Biggest Bugger
That was great, so honest and funny. The hair analogies and metaphors were brilliant. Really loved it.
3The Biggest BuggerThat was great, so honest and funny. The hair analogies and metaphors were brilliant. Really loved it.
12/27/2008 c13 13Nicki BluIs
Huh. Somehow throughout all this I missed the whole cheerleader part.But now that she feels the need to quit and join the math club, the ... ho-humness? That's not even a word... but I didn't want to say cliche again.
But you know what? For all my complaining, I really liked this! The most fun read I've had all day. I can't say it was new but it was refreshing. Thanks for the great read.
Hope you find these reviews useful!
Nicki :P
This review (and the ones preceding it) has been brough to you by the Review Game's Review Marathon. (link in my profile)
13Nicki BluIsHuh. Somehow throughout all this I missed the whole cheerleader part.But now that she feels the need to quit and join the math club, the ... ho-humness? That's not even a word... but I didn't want to say cliche again.
But you know what? For all my complaining, I really liked this! The most fun read I've had all day. I can't say it was new but it was refreshing. Thanks for the great read.
Hope you find these reviews useful!
Nicki :P
This review (and the ones preceding it) has been brough to you by the Review Game's Review Marathon. (link in my profile)
12/27/2008 c12 Nicki BluIs
Aww. It's about time she had a good cry. But I must say this chap was a bit anti-climatic. Her Mom didn't even yell back! And Emory was way to rational and practical for someone who was having a nervous break down. Maybe this chap could have been a bit longer.
I did like the bitchslap part. It made me smile.
Nicki :P
Aww. It's about time she had a good cry. But I must say this chap was a bit anti-climatic. Her Mom didn't even yell back! And Emory was way to rational and practical for someone who was having a nervous break down. Maybe this chap could have been a bit longer.
I did like the bitchslap part. It made me smile.
Nicki :P
12/27/2008 c11 Nicki BluIs
I don't like her going to his house. At know point did it seem like they ahd any sort of relationship other than that one night. So how does she even know where he lives?
I also don't like the "I know your body" line. It's creepy and stalkerish in a heavy breathing sort of way.
Nicki :P
I don't like her going to his house. At know point did it seem like they ahd any sort of relationship other than that one night. So how does she even know where he lives?
I also don't like the "I know your body" line. It's creepy and stalkerish in a heavy breathing sort of way.
Nicki :P
12/27/2008 c10 Nicki BluIs
Whose going to save Emory? She runs around with her bubble armor saving one friend after another from emotional turmoil but whose going to save her?
That wasn't really a review so much as a comment. My review would be that I liked your ability to stir such a response from the reader (me).
I also like the "Crack." It's almost poetic in it use and punctuates the feeling.
Nicki :P
Whose going to save Emory? She runs around with her bubble armor saving one friend after another from emotional turmoil but whose going to save her?
That wasn't really a review so much as a comment. My review would be that I liked your ability to stir such a response from the reader (me).
I also like the "Crack." It's almost poetic in it use and punctuates the feeling.
Nicki :P
12/27/2008 c9 Nicki BluIs
I like how solid Emory's character is. Nothing she does surprises me and her reactions to events are on point with the person she ahs been since chapter one.
I don't like that laugh at the wedding thing. It was... typical for lack of a better word. But I did like how even at her best friends funeral she was still thinking about high school politics.
Nicki :P
I like how solid Emory's character is. Nothing she does surprises me and her reactions to events are on point with the person she ahs been since chapter one.
I don't like that laugh at the wedding thing. It was... typical for lack of a better word. But I did like how even at her best friends funeral she was still thinking about high school politics.
Nicki :P
12/27/2008 c8 Nicki BluIs
*blink blink* Oz is dead? Why? Sigh. Well that certainly was unexpected I'll give you that much... I'm a sucker for structure and repition so I loved that the sentence was repeated for emphasis. I didn't like that Oz is dead. I mean that clears him of any wrong doing sorta (cant be mad as ta deaad guy, right?) and adds that much more angst to the story.
Nicki :P
*blink blink* Oz is dead? Why? Sigh. Well that certainly was unexpected I'll give you that much... I'm a sucker for structure and repition so I loved that the sentence was repeated for emphasis. I didn't like that Oz is dead. I mean that clears him of any wrong doing sorta (cant be mad as ta deaad guy, right?) and adds that much more angst to the story.
Nicki :P