for Confused Musings of a Girl Who Gets Shrek8/30/2008 c4 koerle
Oh. Emory acts a bit harsh to him. Does she have reason to? Or is she one that doesn't need a reason to act like that? ;)
Oh. Emory acts a bit harsh to him. Does she have reason to? Or is she one that doesn't need a reason to act like that? ;)
8/29/2008 c3 koerle
Funny story. I like her ramlings.
I hope we'll get a better view of her dayly life. How things are in school, and at home.
Her mom certainly gives out unorthodox advice. There has to be a sad story behind that...
ps: I love lounging in my bright blue Juicy sweats. They're so soft and comfi!
Funny story. I like her ramlings.
I hope we'll get a better view of her dayly life. How things are in school, and at home.
Her mom certainly gives out unorthodox advice. There has to be a sad story behind that...
ps: I love lounging in my bright blue Juicy sweats. They're so soft and comfi!
8/6/2008 c3 Catcher in the Rye
I dont know if you intend to end it here or not, but this would be a fantastic ending in my opinion. I really liked this and like I said before, I love the writing style!
Thank you for posting this =)
I dont know if you intend to end it here or not, but this would be a fantastic ending in my opinion. I really liked this and like I said before, I love the writing style!
Thank you for posting this =)
8/6/2008 c2 Catcher in the Rye
This is so great. I love this writing style by the way. Off to read the next chapter...
This is so great. I love this writing style by the way. Off to read the next chapter...
8/5/2008 c3 
6Le Tranquille
I like the randomness of this all. Do you know where you're going with it, though? I think that its really great but I just hope you can continue it, and I think you should get somewhat of a plot just so that you have something to go on. Can you read and review my story the not so glamorous life of milicent walker? I need some reviews and hits. Thanks
6Le TranquilleI like the randomness of this all. Do you know where you're going with it, though? I think that its really great but I just hope you can continue it, and I think you should get somewhat of a plot just so that you have something to go on. Can you read and review my story the not so glamorous life of milicent walker? I need some reviews and hits. Thanks
7/7/2008 c2 4Okan Shevket
I stumbled across this 'story' by accident, but to be honest it's brilliant and funny!
The first chapter was awesome. Feelings came across well, and there a part where you said something like:
'compliments tainted by love' or something to that effect...
...Awesome...
In the second chapter it was a completely different to the first, in terms of what she felt. The one sentence that you left alone to maybe highlight was:
'I sigh. Roll over. Fabulous. My long white-blonde hair is curly. I smirk, realizing this must have been from... sweat, last night.'
Very nice. Short sentences showing her actions. :D
So yeah, this is a story or maybe diary (Whatever) i guess people can relate to, so yeah, keep writing. :D
~Okan Shevket~
4Okan ShevketI stumbled across this 'story' by accident, but to be honest it's brilliant and funny!
The first chapter was awesome. Feelings came across well, and there a part where you said something like:
'compliments tainted by love' or something to that effect...
...Awesome...
In the second chapter it was a completely different to the first, in terms of what she felt. The one sentence that you left alone to maybe highlight was:
'I sigh. Roll over. Fabulous. My long white-blonde hair is curly. I smirk, realizing this must have been from... sweat, last night.'
Very nice. Short sentences showing her actions. :D
So yeah, this is a story or maybe diary (Whatever) i guess people can relate to, so yeah, keep writing. :D
~Okan Shevket~
6/15/2008 c2 FunnyFace
The "sweat" line is great. So is the need to find symbolism in everything. Please continue.
The "sweat" line is great. So is the need to find symbolism in everything. Please continue.
6/15/2008 c2 just a little cutie
I like how you take away the stereotypical 'first time' experience and reduce it to what it's really like. i do wonder what the plot is gonna be tho...
I like how you take away the stereotypical 'first time' experience and reduce it to what it's really like. i do wonder what the plot is gonna be tho...
6/7/2008 c1 19Rhea Valente
I like your writing style SO much!
I do wanna read more.#
I dunno what to say about this... it's gripped me enough to want to read more. So, please write! :D
19Rhea ValenteI like your writing style SO much!
I do wanna read more.#
I dunno what to say about this... it's gripped me enough to want to read more. So, please write! :D
6/5/2008 c1 59Tranquil Thorns
This was a very amusing read! (:
I like how this isn't really a 'full' story, but it still tells a story... you know what I mean? The character is so real - you really get a sense of her - maybe even more so than in certain lengthier stories I have read.
Even though this is just the 'rambling' and thoughts of a character, it was easy to follow and fun to read. =D
Very nicely done! Will you continue with this/the character?
59Tranquil ThornsThis was a very amusing read! (:
I like how this isn't really a 'full' story, but it still tells a story... you know what I mean? The character is so real - you really get a sense of her - maybe even more so than in certain lengthier stories I have read.
Even though this is just the 'rambling' and thoughts of a character, it was easy to follow and fun to read. =D
Very nicely done! Will you continue with this/the character?