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9/1/2011 c1 China.Roses.Break
Very funny, especially the last four lines! And the way you described the spider was great, I completely agree with you.
3/19/2011 c1 8WibblyWobblyTimeyWimey
Love it! The way you described everything made me laugh.
5/20/2010 c1 43losing oxygen
LOVE IT! Omigosh I love it so so so much! I was expecting this much when I read the summary. But still, this exceeded my expectations. Good job! Oh, more than 5 reviews! You beat me by so much! ^^

-Train
10/4/2009 c1 Broken Winged Bird
Sorry, I'm too lazy to sign in and leave you a proper review... But LOL. I love this poem! You just gave me my reason to smile for the day. :) lol. -BWB
2/16/2009 c1 172DefineBeauty
lol, this is cute =]

i like the format of this, and the rhyming scheme, it helps the flow go smoothly and it just seems to fit with this piece. and the ryhming doesn't seem forced at all

however, there are some lines that throw off the flow alittle, for example: "Even though this could be your last breath?" it has too many syllables and seems a little out of place

i like how you desceibe the spider in each different stanza, it lets the reader know how you feel about it and it's pretty humorous as well =]
7/8/2008 c1 11Fly Away 2003
*shiver* arachnaphobe here! even spiders the size of a dime will have me out of the room in a heart beat! 15 years old and i still get my dad to kill the spiders... sad i know... -_-
6/6/2008 c1 989East-0f-Eden
I thought it was cute in the end. And you felt pitty for the poor spider so kudos to you.
6/6/2008 c1 25moon-behind-dark-clouds
i absolutely hate spiders so this made me laugh!=) it's a really nice and funny poem. good job!
6/6/2008 c1 17Unique1952
Ha! I have thoughts like this everytime I have to kill a spider. By the title, I started to avoid reading this because I have spider issues to say the least...however, contrary to my issues, I really enjoyed reading this. Nice work.

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