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for Peaceful skies

11/11/2008 c1 612simpleplan13
A review from the Review Game on its first birthday to thank you for being a part of the community.

"beautiful puffs that you are/so white so pure,"... all of the sudden you used the word you and addressed the clouds as oppossed to just describing them, which confused me. I would start with addressing the clouds instead of starting it halfway through.

In the beginning your descriptions were repetitive and a bit cliched, but I think you really turned it around in the second half. You changed the poem's whole tone and description. It was really interesting.
9/11/2008 c1 64fatbird33
oo very peaceful and relaxing...

great descriptions!
6/12/2008 c1 lymli
I like the mixing between peaceful imagery and love.

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