for Peaceful skies11/11/2008 c1 
612simpleplan13
A review from the Review Game on its first birthday to thank you for being a part of the community.
"beautiful puffs that you are/so white so pure,"... all of the sudden you used the word you and addressed the clouds as oppossed to just describing them, which confused me. I would start with addressing the clouds instead of starting it halfway through.
In the beginning your descriptions were repetitive and a bit cliched, but I think you really turned it around in the second half. You changed the poem's whole tone and description. It was really interesting.
612simpleplan13A review from the Review Game on its first birthday to thank you for being a part of the community.
"beautiful puffs that you are/so white so pure,"... all of the sudden you used the word you and addressed the clouds as oppossed to just describing them, which confused me. I would start with addressing the clouds instead of starting it halfway through.
In the beginning your descriptions were repetitive and a bit cliched, but I think you really turned it around in the second half. You changed the poem's whole tone and description. It was really interesting.