for The Synthetic Apostle6/9/2012 c1 
3Chelsea Grin
This is just wow... freakin good man! you're a really awesome writer you know and I felt the way u wrote it was just perfect. Keep writing I'd love ta see more. :)
3Chelsea GrinThis is just wow... freakin good man! you're a really awesome writer you know and I felt the way u wrote it was just perfect. Keep writing I'd love ta see more. :)
11/26/2008 c1 10Caecilia
You might want to put a dividing line between the story and your a/n at the beginning. It seems a bit blocky.
[We wanted to find god.] 'god' is a proper noun. Needs capitalization... This happens multiple times.
[scouting out various trips] I'm not sure I understand... Do you mean 'tips' or actually 'trips'?
Whoa. Intense writing. Can't really see why you don't have more people reading and reviewing this. Great writing!
~Caecilia, Beer Run!
10CaeciliaYou might want to put a dividing line between the story and your a/n at the beginning. It seems a bit blocky.
[We wanted to find god.] 'god' is a proper noun. Needs capitalization... This happens multiple times.
[scouting out various trips] I'm not sure I understand... Do you mean 'tips' or actually 'trips'?
Whoa. Intense writing. Can't really see why you don't have more people reading and reviewing this. Great writing!
~Caecilia, Beer Run!
11/24/2008 c1 6ephemeral dance
I have no idea why this doesn't have more reviews. I thought it was absolutely amazing. A trippy little piece, yes, but fantastic nonetheless.
It's like you're the beatnik all the little all the new-age-Beatles-loving-pseudo-new-age-Hippies at my school strive to be. Fav'd for sure.
6ephemeral danceI have no idea why this doesn't have more reviews. I thought it was absolutely amazing. A trippy little piece, yes, but fantastic nonetheless.
It's like you're the beatnik all the little all the new-age-Beatles-loving-pseudo-new-age-Hippies at my school strive to be. Fav'd for sure.
11/4/2008 c1 3Cambion
What still amazes me is that this was all spawned from a simple writing exercise that Girolamo had you do. Creativity in action...
3CambionWhat still amazes me is that this was all spawned from a simple writing exercise that Girolamo had you do. Creativity in action...
10/28/2008 c1 FuckMeAlice
Wow... that was pretty trippy. I liked it a lot. I have to agree with anyone else who might have said it; your style brings to mind Chuck Palahniuk. I just may get addicted to you writing.
-Stardust from the Roadhouse.
Wow... that was pretty trippy. I liked it a lot. I have to agree with anyone else who might have said it; your style brings to mind Chuck Palahniuk. I just may get addicted to you writing.
-Stardust from the Roadhouse.