6/15/2008 c1 612simpleplan13
"(you never thought I found it cute didn’t you?)" I thought it was odd that you capitalized the I here since the rest were all lowercase.

"your over-all awkwardness"...overall

"that one snowy evening" I don't think you need the snowy there, I felt it was implied from the earlier part of that sentence

In the fourth paragraph, you call snow a them and they, but it's really an it. Snowflakes are plural, but snow is singular.

I think the ending was a bit repetitive and the "have also went by" was awkwardly phrased.

I did like hte piece though, the descriptions of the snow was really great and I love how you tied that into the whole idea. I also like how the beginning and ending are similar. Really great job.

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6/15/2008 c1 81thursdays and rain
wonderful descriptions.. very vivid.. good job, keep it up ;)