for I look at you6/17/2008 c1 
3oememo
The last three lines were the most honest.
There is a saying we only hurt the ones we love. On one level the saying is trite, since people who don't care about us don't get hurt - they blow right by us.
On another level, you nailed the dog eat dog world on the head. Another saying is bad things roll downhill. Kids are the bottom of the hill unless the family has pets. We hurt so we hurt those around us so we will know they know we are hurting. What's that saying, "Misery loves company"?
I didn't say it was right or good, I just said it was honest. Real love works to find a way a way to avoid "kicking the dog," and if that love slips and kicks the dog, real love apologizes.
I posted my first two poems, then took the second down. If I get time today, I am going to rework it and put it back up. The first poem is better, but the second poem resonates with the paragraph above this one. It's title was "You made me."
The honesty at the end of the poem is a good growing place. Good job.
3oememoThe last three lines were the most honest.
There is a saying we only hurt the ones we love. On one level the saying is trite, since people who don't care about us don't get hurt - they blow right by us.
On another level, you nailed the dog eat dog world on the head. Another saying is bad things roll downhill. Kids are the bottom of the hill unless the family has pets. We hurt so we hurt those around us so we will know they know we are hurting. What's that saying, "Misery loves company"?
I didn't say it was right or good, I just said it was honest. Real love works to find a way a way to avoid "kicking the dog," and if that love slips and kicks the dog, real love apologizes.
I posted my first two poems, then took the second down. If I get time today, I am going to rework it and put it back up. The first poem is better, but the second poem resonates with the paragraph above this one. It's title was "You made me."
The honesty at the end of the poem is a good growing place. Good job.