for The Break Up11/27/2008 c1 
1Engineer of Words
You know, I wish I could find something to critique, but I can't. Nice work.
I really enjoyed reading this, especially in part to no lack of well-written violence. And the irony at the end is just icing on the cake.
1Engineer of WordsYou know, I wish I could find something to critique, but I can't. Nice work.
I really enjoyed reading this, especially in part to no lack of well-written violence. And the irony at the end is just icing on the cake.
9/23/2008 c1 21Aiko-Moon
This isn't really my thing, the whole assasin like stuff. But you did a good job on it. i was surprised that I was able to read through the whole thing. Normally if it doesn't interest me then I stop reading. But this was very well writen. So good job. :)
21Aiko-MoonThis isn't really my thing, the whole assasin like stuff. But you did a good job on it. i was surprised that I was able to read through the whole thing. Normally if it doesn't interest me then I stop reading. But this was very well writen. So good job. :)
9/12/2008 c1 10FrameJock
"Hell hath no fury..."
Jeez and wow.
Well written, crisp and smooth. Katja's pain is very real and compelling. Can't wait to see more of this lovely lady.
10FrameJock"Hell hath no fury..."
Jeez and wow.
Well written, crisp and smooth. Katja's pain is very real and compelling. Can't wait to see more of this lovely lady.
8/15/2008 c1 10Caecilia
I love your descriptions. Especially in the whole Eddie being shot repeatedly scene. It's so vivid.
I love Katja's stories. She's definitely an interesting character. I really love the dark humor that is throughout this story. I'm a sucker for a piece of dark humor.
Amazing stuff you have, Zerom. I'm addicted. Now I have to go read more...
~~Caecilia.
10CaeciliaI love your descriptions. Especially in the whole Eddie being shot repeatedly scene. It's so vivid.
I love Katja's stories. She's definitely an interesting character. I really love the dark humor that is throughout this story. I'm a sucker for a piece of dark humor.
Amazing stuff you have, Zerom. I'm addicted. Now I have to go read more...
~~Caecilia.
8/13/2008 c1 Bellanyx
This story was just as good as the last one, and I thank you for that.
I also want to thank you for not calling a surpressor a silencer... It's the little things that matter, ha ha.
This story was just as good as the last one, and I thank you for that.
I also want to thank you for not calling a surpressor a silencer... It's the little things that matter, ha ha.
7/19/2008 c1 14Thoughtful Silence
Alrighty, first off... I love the sardonic, kinda dark humour that laces this. It was a nice piece, with a little romance, a little tears and then a little Mk. 23. The way you integrate little details of the characters throughout the story was a nice touch, even though it seemed a bit... excessive at times (I.E. when Katja was leaving the hotel and you detailed her entire attire).
The thing about this is... even though he's a complete bastard, I prefer Eddie in this story. Katja is too, I don't know, bipolar in personality? One minute tears, and thinking 'bout taking him back (despite said cheating, thieving and general attempted murdering) next first-class killer... Though I did like how that added an inherent 'human side' to her. She's not one of these 'cold' assassins that are all too frequent.
I liked the ending, but I didn't like it... if only because I have NEVER heard the saying "break-ups can be murder on an individual". I would take out everything on that line 'cept for 'break-ups can be murder' just to cement the effect of the... I wanna say cheesiness?
Another thing 'bout this, I found, was that some of the sentences were really long, with an abundance of adjectives, adverbs and nouns invariably mixed in with every punctuation mark, except for a full-stop. Don't get me wrong, they are good, descriptive sentences (which are what most stories lack) but some lines I had to read twice just to keep up with your thought process, ya know?
Anyways, despite what I say, I really liked this.
-Silence, courtesy of The Roadhouse.
14Thoughtful SilenceAlrighty, first off... I love the sardonic, kinda dark humour that laces this. It was a nice piece, with a little romance, a little tears and then a little Mk. 23. The way you integrate little details of the characters throughout the story was a nice touch, even though it seemed a bit... excessive at times (I.E. when Katja was leaving the hotel and you detailed her entire attire).
The thing about this is... even though he's a complete bastard, I prefer Eddie in this story. Katja is too, I don't know, bipolar in personality? One minute tears, and thinking 'bout taking him back (despite said cheating, thieving and general attempted murdering) next first-class killer... Though I did like how that added an inherent 'human side' to her. She's not one of these 'cold' assassins that are all too frequent.
I liked the ending, but I didn't like it... if only because I have NEVER heard the saying "break-ups can be murder on an individual". I would take out everything on that line 'cept for 'break-ups can be murder' just to cement the effect of the... I wanna say cheesiness?
Another thing 'bout this, I found, was that some of the sentences were really long, with an abundance of adjectives, adverbs and nouns invariably mixed in with every punctuation mark, except for a full-stop. Don't get me wrong, they are good, descriptive sentences (which are what most stories lack) but some lines I had to read twice just to keep up with your thought process, ya know?
Anyways, despite what I say, I really liked this.
-Silence, courtesy of The Roadhouse.
6/26/2008 c1 21Nina Kindred
I love this! I'm so glad you checked out my work. I check out everyone that posts on my stuff. I can't wait to read more. Of course Russia, Russians, and angry women are three of my favorite things.
21Nina KindredI love this! I'm so glad you checked out my work. I check out everyone that posts on my stuff. I can't wait to read more. Of course Russia, Russians, and angry women are three of my favorite things.
6/20/2008 c1 5FairlyOddGirl16
oh my god. that was amazing. you're an excellent writer. these stories are so addicting. im on my way to read your other one now. i hope you write more!
5FairlyOddGirl16oh my god. that was amazing. you're an excellent writer. these stories are so addicting. im on my way to read your other one now. i hope you write more!
6/18/2008 c1 2MidnightFlight
wow. you are an amazing writer. plez write more! these two stories about Katja completely captivated me! they're amazing! Can't wait for more!
2MidnightFlightwow. you are an amazing writer. plez write more! these two stories about Katja completely captivated me! they're amazing! Can't wait for more!