for Rain2/21/2016 c1 Just a nitpick
In your description, you say the child is paralyzed. Paralysis does not cause loss of consciousness, I'm sure you meant the child is in a coma.
This honestly detracted much from my potential enjoyment of the song, because I'm extremely confused.
In your description, you say the child is paralyzed. Paralysis does not cause loss of consciousness, I'm sure you meant the child is in a coma.
This honestly detracted much from my potential enjoyment of the song, because I'm extremely confused.
12/14/2010 c1 
55Poet Lordy
A very interesting piece again, a touchy theme I know and captured so very well from the other side of normal. (If that made sense).
Like the chorus so much I could almost hear the tune.
Touched me.
Now you know that poetry's my bag in life, I don't read much other than that on here, but this I make an exception. Yes, songs can be poetic, it has many elements here, but this is a smooth deliverance of its story and packs a punch at the end too. I can see that child, I can feel the Mothers pain through the child.
Another GR8 piece R.
55Poet LordyA very interesting piece again, a touchy theme I know and captured so very well from the other side of normal. (If that made sense).
Like the chorus so much I could almost hear the tune.
Touched me.
Now you know that poetry's my bag in life, I don't read much other than that on here, but this I make an exception. Yes, songs can be poetic, it has many elements here, but this is a smooth deliverance of its story and packs a punch at the end too. I can see that child, I can feel the Mothers pain through the child.
Another GR8 piece R.
6/17/2008 c1 68centuriespast
Whoa
*wipes tears*
I loved it
But it was SAD
But still very good
You have a good writing style
Youre on my fav author list
Please R&R some of my stuff
68centuriespastWhoa
*wipes tears*
I loved it
But it was SAD
But still very good
You have a good writing style
Youre on my fav author list
Please R&R some of my stuff