for Devouring Devotion8/10/2009 c1 
3BlaznFangurl
That was just disturbing and creepy and completely WTF. You write nice as always, but this one made me go okay...yeah horror and stuff like this isn't my thing...
Anyways repaying you for the great review^^ Thanks a lot, see you later, Blazn.
3BlaznFangurlThat was just disturbing and creepy and completely WTF. You write nice as always, but this one made me go okay...yeah horror and stuff like this isn't my thing...
Anyways repaying you for the great review^^ Thanks a lot, see you later, Blazn.
7/6/2009 c1 1Pig In A Dollhouse
I like it, even though it made me go O.O
It's so deliciously dark and macabre; you've certainly got a talent for this kind of writing XD
1Pig In A DollhouseI like it, even though it made me go O.O
It's so deliciously dark and macabre; you've certainly got a talent for this kind of writing XD
10/29/2008 c1 XxLittleSallyxX
That was so detailed, I started getting chills through my spine! Awesome!
That was so detailed, I started getting chills through my spine! Awesome!
8/22/2008 c1 1Tesla Shoui
Wow. This one was really compelling. That's really all there is to say about it.
1Tesla ShouiWow. This one was really compelling. That's really all there is to say about it.
8/12/2008 c1 criti-sized
Wow, talk about rough. I'm little awed by this piece still, I'm not sure whether it's a poem, or not, but what the hell. It's good nonetheless.
I like the intensity of it that you managed to carry throughout the entire thing, and the words that held a really harsh meaning to them while at the same time they expressed just what the title is. ^_^
C.S.
Wow, talk about rough. I'm little awed by this piece still, I'm not sure whether it's a poem, or not, but what the hell. It's good nonetheless.
I like the intensity of it that you managed to carry throughout the entire thing, and the words that held a really harsh meaning to them while at the same time they expressed just what the title is. ^_^
C.S.
8/12/2008 c1 8Violent Messiah
OK, so I saw four of my fellow bartenders review this piece, and I had to see what's up. Now normally, I don't review stuff like this, but it was so delightfully dark and out there...I feel compelled to. Strange things like this piece appeal to me for some reason.
This was a very different take on lusting and obsessing after someone, and I think it's going to be hard to forget this one. Awesomely disturbing theme, I throughly enjoyed reading it.
"I want to eat you,
wanted too,
had too,
did."
That was such a simple section, but still pretty powerful to me. Who knew that love, lust and possessiveness from a cannibal's point of view could be so cool? -=x
Thanks for stopping at The Roadhouse, Mad Hatter. Cheers!
8Violent MessiahOK, so I saw four of my fellow bartenders review this piece, and I had to see what's up. Now normally, I don't review stuff like this, but it was so delightfully dark and out there...I feel compelled to. Strange things like this piece appeal to me for some reason.
This was a very different take on lusting and obsessing after someone, and I think it's going to be hard to forget this one. Awesomely disturbing theme, I throughly enjoyed reading it.
"I want to eat you,
wanted too,
had too,
did."
That was such a simple section, but still pretty powerful to me. Who knew that love, lust and possessiveness from a cannibal's point of view could be so cool? -=x
Thanks for stopping at The Roadhouse, Mad Hatter. Cheers!
8/12/2008 c1 7eamane tinuviel
hmm. interesting.
i like your diction. you word choices enhanced the feel of the piece. you were really able to convey the obsessive, hunger-driven character of the narrator with your words. kudos for that.
i especially liked your reference to the sculpture of David. i thought it was very fitting for the poem and clever too.
the ending, however, didn't really seem strong enough, but that's just me.
overall, good piece..
7eamane tinuvielhmm. interesting.
i like your diction. you word choices enhanced the feel of the piece. you were really able to convey the obsessive, hunger-driven character of the narrator with your words. kudos for that.
i especially liked your reference to the sculpture of David. i thought it was very fitting for the poem and clever too.
the ending, however, didn't really seem strong enough, but that's just me.
overall, good piece..
8/11/2008 c1 10Caecilia
I liked this. Very dark and unique approach to love. I really liked the ending. The only thing I can say against this piece is in the paragraph where it says 'I want to eat you,/ wanted too,/ had too,/ did." I think you're using the wrong version of 'too', I'm pretty sure it's supposed to be 'to'... But that could just be me.
This kind of reminds me of the book Perfume, near the ending, If you've read it, I think you'll know what I'm talking about, if not, then... It's a good book, and I think you'd understand the part I'm talking about.
Morbidly amazing. Good stuff, good stuff.
~~ Caecilia, from down at the Roadhouse
10CaeciliaI liked this. Very dark and unique approach to love. I really liked the ending. The only thing I can say against this piece is in the paragraph where it says 'I want to eat you,/ wanted too,/ had too,/ did." I think you're using the wrong version of 'too', I'm pretty sure it's supposed to be 'to'... But that could just be me.
This kind of reminds me of the book Perfume, near the ending, If you've read it, I think you'll know what I'm talking about, if not, then... It's a good book, and I think you'd understand the part I'm talking about.
Morbidly amazing. Good stuff, good stuff.
~~ Caecilia, from down at the Roadhouse
8/11/2008 c1 painted eyes
Wow. This is a very...how should I say...unique approach to love =] I really liked the last line 'What a Waste' as it made it seem slightly light-hearted as if the person talking in the poem had just shrugged the experience off. I think that maybe some readers would see the last line as slightly out of place, but I quite like that, as it is a good twist. The only critique that I could say is that I thought the vomiting part was a bit too much. Though, opinions are always subjective.
Anyhoo, keep up the good work!
painted eyes - courtesy of The Roadhouse.
Wow. This is a very...how should I say...unique approach to love =] I really liked the last line 'What a Waste' as it made it seem slightly light-hearted as if the person talking in the poem had just shrugged the experience off. I think that maybe some readers would see the last line as slightly out of place, but I quite like that, as it is a good twist. The only critique that I could say is that I thought the vomiting part was a bit too much. Though, opinions are always subjective.
Anyhoo, keep up the good work!
painted eyes - courtesy of The Roadhouse.
8/11/2008 c1 15heart shaped box x3
I loved it. It was grostiquely amazing. The word choice was perfect for this kind of writing. The only critique I would have to make is that I do not think "What a waste," is a good ending. It seems to just kinda... fade out. I could be wrong though.
Great job!
-Drea {heart shaped box}
15heart shaped box x3I loved it. It was grostiquely amazing. The word choice was perfect for this kind of writing. The only critique I would have to make is that I do not think "What a waste," is a good ending. It seems to just kinda... fade out. I could be wrong though.
Great job!
-Drea {heart shaped box}
6/27/2008 c1 102Charmingly Temporary
I have to admit, this was totally disturbing, yet I liked it all the same. Though maybe the part about the vomit was just a bit much for me, it was all very well written.
102Charmingly TemporaryI have to admit, this was totally disturbing, yet I liked it all the same. Though maybe the part about the vomit was just a bit much for me, it was all very well written.