for Alone6/22/2008 c1 fleur de l'est
I like the imagery, and
"None
But me-
Forgotten"
really creates a sense of solitude.
Great touch of hope in the end though. Kind of makes it sadder.. I don't know.
Excellent flow.
Well done!
~fleur
I like the imagery, and
"None
But me-
Forgotten"
really creates a sense of solitude.
Great touch of hope in the end though. Kind of makes it sadder.. I don't know.
Excellent flow.
Well done!
~fleur
6/22/2008 c1 
62Averybarbarian
Sad yet wonderful! The feeling of being alone the empty void of pain that consumes oneself when one is left to wander alone. Brilliant I loved it! I really liked how you did the lines the fewer words make them stand out more than if you had filled an entire line with the whole thought. It was great! Keep writing =)
62AverybarbarianSad yet wonderful! The feeling of being alone the empty void of pain that consumes oneself when one is left to wander alone. Brilliant I loved it! I really liked how you did the lines the fewer words make them stand out more than if you had filled an entire line with the whole thought. It was great! Keep writing =)