for Kissing a Rockstar8/4/2010 c4 
99Dreamers-Requiem
Once more, a really lovely poem. This one felt kind of dreamy and relaxing. The start is quite sweet, innocent almost in the feel, and to me, it felt like we were jerked out of that near the end, like being awoken from a dream. "With head upon feathers" is a great line.
99Dreamers-RequiemOnce more, a really lovely poem. This one felt kind of dreamy and relaxing. The start is quite sweet, innocent almost in the feel, and to me, it felt like we were jerked out of that near the end, like being awoken from a dream. "With head upon feathers" is a great line.
8/3/2010 c3 Dreamers-Requiem
Excellent poem. These are really good - I love this one, it's kind of dark, but it shows, I feel, the real side of human nature and how we actually all feel (ESPECIALLY on the rebound). You have a nice skill for capturing that sort of thing.
Excellent poem. These are really good - I love this one, it's kind of dark, but it shows, I feel, the real side of human nature and how we actually all feel (ESPECIALLY on the rebound). You have a nice skill for capturing that sort of thing.
8/2/2010 c2 this wild abyss
Solid poem. The rhythm and flow of the piece were just right, and I really enjoyed what you did with the the premise. Altogether, a very nice piece.
Solid poem. The rhythm and flow of the piece were just right, and I really enjoyed what you did with the the premise. Altogether, a very nice piece.
7/31/2010 c2 Dreamers-Requiem
Most things are never as good as you expect/imagine, and I think this sums that feeling up perfectly. I like the build up to the last line, really nicely done.
Most things are never as good as you expect/imagine, and I think this sums that feeling up perfectly. I like the build up to the last line, really nicely done.
7/30/2010 c1 Dreamers-Requiem
I love the metaphor used here, and I can't help but wonder if it's an actual rockstar or just someone put up on a pedastol :P Anyways, I really liked it, found myself actually licking my lips when you were describing the taste of chocolate on your lips. Lovely.
I love the metaphor used here, and I can't help but wonder if it's an actual rockstar or just someone put up on a pedastol :P Anyways, I really liked it, found myself actually licking my lips when you were describing the taste of chocolate on your lips. Lovely.
7/24/2010 c4 4InkedSoul
Aw, sad ending. Love works in many ways. It seems nice to be kissed awake by the one you love, although the guy didn't appreciate that...
Can't even kiss the one you love in your dreams...Heart breaking, but great depiction of emotion and love ^^
~Idareutoguess
4InkedSoulAw, sad ending. Love works in many ways. It seems nice to be kissed awake by the one you love, although the guy didn't appreciate that...
Can't even kiss the one you love in your dreams...Heart breaking, but great depiction of emotion and love ^^
~Idareutoguess
7/24/2010 c3 InkedSoul
Haha, I chuckled at the ending. Love is pretty selfish isn't it? We want to be loved, or kissed, unconditionally that we'll go to any lengths for it. We're desperate for attention, but I guess that's our human nature. I like how the love shown in this poem isn't so cliche like the ones shown on the television or in movies or all those similar romance books. You try to bring out what love truly is, not what it appears to be; the ugly side of it. At least that's what I got from it. I might be wrong though but it's a poem, and it speaks to people in a lot of different ways, like art does.
Yet again I say, another great one (:
~Idareutoguess
Haha, I chuckled at the ending. Love is pretty selfish isn't it? We want to be loved, or kissed, unconditionally that we'll go to any lengths for it. We're desperate for attention, but I guess that's our human nature. I like how the love shown in this poem isn't so cliche like the ones shown on the television or in movies or all those similar romance books. You try to bring out what love truly is, not what it appears to be; the ugly side of it. At least that's what I got from it. I might be wrong though but it's a poem, and it speaks to people in a lot of different ways, like art does.
Yet again I say, another great one (:
~Idareutoguess
7/24/2010 c2 InkedSoul
Hmm...why is the kiss best imagined, I wonder? It seems like an interesting thing to experience, considering it makes your heart speed up and all. I'm trying to look at this in a different way (I was never that good at deciphering poems..) but I guess I failed, haha. Anyway, another interesting one. I really wonder where you're going with this.. (:
~Idareutoguess
Hmm...why is the kiss best imagined, I wonder? It seems like an interesting thing to experience, considering it makes your heart speed up and all. I'm trying to look at this in a different way (I was never that good at deciphering poems..) but I guess I failed, haha. Anyway, another interesting one. I really wonder where you're going with this.. (:
~Idareutoguess
7/24/2010 c1 InkedSoul
Haha, the ending to this was ironic. I wonder, is the poem about literally kissing a rockstar, or just kissing someone you truly adore and admire? Hmm...
Anyway, how you managed to put such imagery and great metaphors into such a short piece is beyond me but all I know is now I'm craving some chocolate xD
Great job with this. It was pretty new to me, and I found it interestingly put.
Onto the next one!
~Idareutoguess
P.S. : Since you reviewed such a long chpater of mine, I'll review all four poems in return (no need to return them ^^)
Haha, the ending to this was ironic. I wonder, is the poem about literally kissing a rockstar, or just kissing someone you truly adore and admire? Hmm...
Anyway, how you managed to put such imagery and great metaphors into such a short piece is beyond me but all I know is now I'm craving some chocolate xD
Great job with this. It was pretty new to me, and I found it interestingly put.
Onto the next one!
~Idareutoguess
P.S. : Since you reviewed such a long chpater of mine, I'll review all four poems in return (no need to return them ^^)
7/19/2010 c4 1esthaelum
I liked this... Even though it was a bit sad at the end... I just loved the feeling of devotion and innocence in this poem. It reminds me of a girl being madly in love with this boy who doesnt give a damn about her, but she cant help but imagine what it would be like to kiss him... *Sigh*
'And you said, "Please, don't do that again."
- Dunno why, but this was my favourite line. Hehe.
Great poem, I enjoyed reading it! :)
Roadhouse~
1esthaelumI liked this... Even though it was a bit sad at the end... I just loved the feeling of devotion and innocence in this poem. It reminds me of a girl being madly in love with this boy who doesnt give a damn about her, but she cant help but imagine what it would be like to kiss him... *Sigh*
'And you said, "Please, don't do that again."
- Dunno why, but this was my favourite line. Hehe.
Great poem, I enjoyed reading it! :)
Roadhouse~
7/18/2010 c4 22lipleaf
I like the fact that you didn't use punctuation in here. It gives the poem and airy, fluid sort of feel that is consistent with the idea of "dreaming" and adds to the gentle, relaxed mood. Usually I don't like it when poems have the beginning of each line capitalized because it looks and feels awkward, but it actually worked quite well in this one. Even though each line flows into the next, it almost feels as if every one is its own individual thought that is just vaguely connected to the rest.
The vagueness of this poem makes it easy for a lot people to relate to. You've expressed nicely what many feel but can't really explain properly. Your word choice is interesting- "with head upon feathers." I actually thought first of clouds when I read this, again tying in nicely with the theme of dreaming. There's a restful sort of aura about that line.
22lipleafI like the fact that you didn't use punctuation in here. It gives the poem and airy, fluid sort of feel that is consistent with the idea of "dreaming" and adds to the gentle, relaxed mood. Usually I don't like it when poems have the beginning of each line capitalized because it looks and feels awkward, but it actually worked quite well in this one. Even though each line flows into the next, it almost feels as if every one is its own individual thought that is just vaguely connected to the rest.
The vagueness of this poem makes it easy for a lot people to relate to. You've expressed nicely what many feel but can't really explain properly. Your word choice is interesting- "with head upon feathers." I actually thought first of clouds when I read this, again tying in nicely with the theme of dreaming. There's a restful sort of aura about that line.
7/18/2010 c4 45deefective
Hm, interesting. I felt like the first four lines of this piece are completely separate from the rest. The tone, voice and atmosphere is so different. Maybe if you had used breaks instead of new paragraph lines and then a paragraph line in between those four lines and the rest of the piece, I could have meshed them together better when I read this. But without that, they sound like two completely different pieces. It's not that either is bad, it's just that they're so different.
"Instead into those of your picture"
That line was pretty awkward. I think you could have phrased that differently.
After the first four lines, I liked this piece a lot more. You had some lovely imagery in there and you really set the scene. I felt like you were describing a dream, which it was. I like the fact that you actually didn't say very much but it read like a whole lot. I could feel the narrator's want/need to kiss this person again in that one sentence. My favorite line was:
"With head upon feathers, in the darkness, I had a dream"
It's very poetic and there's this certain softness to it that I really liked. I noticed you didn't use punctuation throughout except in the dialogue and at the end. Interesting choice. It could be seen as accidental yet at the same time it could tie in with the whole dreaming idea. Nicely done.
45deefectiveHm, interesting. I felt like the first four lines of this piece are completely separate from the rest. The tone, voice and atmosphere is so different. Maybe if you had used breaks instead of new paragraph lines and then a paragraph line in between those four lines and the rest of the piece, I could have meshed them together better when I read this. But without that, they sound like two completely different pieces. It's not that either is bad, it's just that they're so different.
"Instead into those of your picture"
That line was pretty awkward. I think you could have phrased that differently.
After the first four lines, I liked this piece a lot more. You had some lovely imagery in there and you really set the scene. I felt like you were describing a dream, which it was. I like the fact that you actually didn't say very much but it read like a whole lot. I could feel the narrator's want/need to kiss this person again in that one sentence. My favorite line was:
"With head upon feathers, in the darkness, I had a dream"
It's very poetic and there's this certain softness to it that I really liked. I noticed you didn't use punctuation throughout except in the dialogue and at the end. Interesting choice. It could be seen as accidental yet at the same time it could tie in with the whole dreaming idea. Nicely done.
7/18/2010 c1 this wild abyss
A very nice extended metaphor. It was descriptive and created a nice image in my mind. The last line carried a nice punch as well.
A very nice extended metaphor. It was descriptive and created a nice image in my mind. The last line carried a nice punch as well.
1/10/2010 c3 xXhootsXx
You're good at writing poems! I can't believe you wrote this almost two years ago! (: Time flies, eh?
You're good at writing poems! I can't believe you wrote this almost two years ago! (: Time flies, eh?