for The Last Schilling8/2/2008 c1 
42Starfire17
I really enjoyed this.
The rhyme scheme and structure are set out very well although in line 2 I think you meant to say "with a heavy sigh" not "with heavy sigh". I particularly liked the line "Every value of my life just quickly fading away" and all the different ways you manage to convey money (check, bills, logging in to pay) and the way it shows how money pervades our lives.
I also liked how you presented the whole concept of giving the money but not feeling anymore that it will help anyone. I can't explain the idea properly but in this poem you've managed to explain it perfectly so good job!
42Starfire17I really enjoyed this.
The rhyme scheme and structure are set out very well although in line 2 I think you meant to say "with a heavy sigh" not "with heavy sigh". I particularly liked the line "Every value of my life just quickly fading away" and all the different ways you manage to convey money (check, bills, logging in to pay) and the way it shows how money pervades our lives.
I also liked how you presented the whole concept of giving the money but not feeling anymore that it will help anyone. I can't explain the idea properly but in this poem you've managed to explain it perfectly so good job!
6/24/2008 c1 55Quoven
Great poem. I think a lot of people feel this way. You have captured this feeling in a great way.
55QuovenGreat poem. I think a lot of people feel this way. You have captured this feeling in a great way.
6/24/2008 c1 57October Sun
OMG! You are such a talented writer, girl. This is fantastic! It reminds me of the poem, The Highway Man.
-Hadley
57October SunOMG! You are such a talented writer, girl. This is fantastic! It reminds me of the poem, The Highway Man.
-Hadley