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6/24/2008 c1 3Apotheosis X
The repetition of "they own you, they won" goes well with the idea of "every day, every time". The concept of The Machine- this droning, robotic, faceless thing- probably wouldn't have come across so strongly if you hadn't done that. I especially like the lines concerning this "Don't question it" mentality, because it's that mentality that drives me insane. Good job, and I have to say it- thanks.

6/24/2008 c1 3Pheonixflower-the-Immortal
6/24/2008 c1 11La Demoiselle Aline
Very clever :)

It actually makes people think, I like it, great job!

6/24/2008 c1 57October Sun
Wow! I don't even know what to say anymore, these are absolutely FANTASTIC. Love at first phrase.

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