for Hate7/20/2008 c1 
612simpleplan13
I think fp repeated the first line twice by accident.
"Homosexuality"... I would just say sexuality since you haven't mentioned any specific races, etc. it doesn't make sense to mention a specific sexuality when we don't like bisexuality, transgenders, etc.
"Or that are short."... that should end with a question mark
"You might as well be thorough"... that needs to end with a period
I like this piece it makes a really great point and the last line is very cheeky. Nicely done.
PS If you're bored check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (links in my profile).
612simpleplan13I think fp repeated the first line twice by accident.
"Homosexuality"... I would just say sexuality since you haven't mentioned any specific races, etc. it doesn't make sense to mention a specific sexuality when we don't like bisexuality, transgenders, etc.
"Or that are short."... that should end with a question mark
"You might as well be thorough"... that needs to end with a period
I like this piece it makes a really great point and the last line is very cheeky. Nicely done.
PS If you're bored check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (links in my profile).
7/6/2008 c1 70EyesEmphatic
I love it. Just love it.
I tried to convey this kind of idea in my 'Stereotyping Black' - but this piece stomps all over mine.
Thank you for writing this!
70EyesEmphaticI love it. Just love it.
I tried to convey this kind of idea in my 'Stereotyping Black' - but this piece stomps all over mine.
Thank you for writing this!