for She should have known better3/12/2014 c1 DragonOwl
I loved it! At first it was annoyed by his accent, but it began to grow on me!
I loved it! At first it was annoyed by his accent, but it began to grow on me!
7/4/2008 c1 
28Erisah Mae
Yeah, no cellphone as I decided that it didn't fit the time period that the story ended up fallng into. As I don't actually intend to submit this into any competition, I don't see how this is a major issue.
28Erisah MaeYeah, no cellphone as I decided that it didn't fit the time period that the story ended up fallng into. As I don't actually intend to submit this into any competition, I don't see how this is a major issue.
7/3/2008 c1 nYmOuS
u ddnt use celphne in the stry it said it shud b a main thng.
u ddnt use celphne in the stry it said it shud b a main thng.
7/3/2008 c1 16White Rose Blossom
Aww, adorable :) I love the way he spoke, I could hear his voice in my head. Irish/Scottish accent, yes? Or something similiar?
Great job!
-Aria
16White Rose BlossomAww, adorable :) I love the way he spoke, I could hear his voice in my head. Irish/Scottish accent, yes? Or something similiar?
Great job!
-Aria
7/3/2008 c1 7sketchingaCYNiC
aww! I LOVED THIS! so, so, SO cute... so well written. great challenge response. :] i loved the characters. i love how kathleen was so like.. practical and cold but at the end she warmed up, and i love how alastor (moody? nah, just kidding) was so funny and cute. found you 'cuz someone said they found a challenge response (yours) and shared it with people :)
7sketchingaCYNiCaww! I LOVED THIS! so, so, SO cute... so well written. great challenge response. :] i loved the characters. i love how kathleen was so like.. practical and cold but at the end she warmed up, and i love how alastor (moody? nah, just kidding) was so funny and cute. found you 'cuz someone said they found a challenge response (yours) and shared it with people :)
7/3/2008 c1 5YoungInside
That was adorable. ;) I think you did a wonderful job on this. Good work. You answered the challenge really well.
5YoungInsideThat was adorable. ;) I think you did a wonderful job on this. Good work. You answered the challenge really well.
7/2/2008 c1 2mia5081
I'm not going to lie, the end was really depressing. But it was so nicely written that I won't cry lol
Great job!
~Mia
2mia5081I'm not going to lie, the end was really depressing. But it was so nicely written that I won't cry lol
Great job!
~Mia
7/2/2008 c1 9Lily Llynn
Very creative twist on the challenge, and a very awesome response. I really enjoyed this. (: Yes, it's sappy, but the plot and characters and dialogue are fantastic. (: I thought it was going to be depressing with the beginning, but by the end I knew it wasn't. I'm adding to my c2, hehe. (:
9Lily LlynnVery creative twist on the challenge, and a very awesome response. I really enjoyed this. (: Yes, it's sappy, but the plot and characters and dialogue are fantastic. (: I thought it was going to be depressing with the beginning, but by the end I knew it wasn't. I'm adding to my c2, hehe. (:
7/1/2008 c1 9Stahlut
Wow I am so close to speechless, That was beautiful. I always love your style, and that just proved how brilliant it is. I really truly thought it was magnificant, well done!
9StahlutWow I am so close to speechless, That was beautiful. I always love your style, and that just proved how brilliant it is. I really truly thought it was magnificant, well done!
7/1/2008 c1 4madebeautiful
Very good story. I won't being doing your challeage, as I don't like to have rules when I write, but I thoroughly enjoyed your story. I only saw one spelling mistake. You spelled color, colour. There shouldn't be a u. Other than that, great job!
4madebeautifulVery good story. I won't being doing your challeage, as I don't like to have rules when I write, but I thoroughly enjoyed your story. I only saw one spelling mistake. You spelled color, colour. There shouldn't be a u. Other than that, great job!
7/1/2008 c1 1Kaley Geminni
He better return to her. That's all I have to say. lol great writing, though! I love your description of the ocean and how it plays as background imagery. :)
1Kaley GeminniHe better return to her. That's all I have to say. lol great writing, though! I love your description of the ocean and how it plays as background imagery. :)
7/1/2008 c1 11Jessiquie
haha. Nice ending!
I really like this, you did really well with that challenge. NO cell phones mentioned, but due ot the stories context, thats understandable.
These seems like really good challenges. where do you get them from? Im looking for some myself to do.
11Jessiquiehaha. Nice ending!
I really like this, you did really well with that challenge. NO cell phones mentioned, but due ot the stories context, thats understandable.
These seems like really good challenges. where do you get them from? Im looking for some myself to do.
7/1/2008 c1 10Koki Enwai
Sappy indeed but not in an irritating way. This was. . . cute. I rather liked it, so thanks for the enjoyable read!
Keep up the good work!
- Koki
10Koki EnwaiSappy indeed but not in an irritating way. This was. . . cute. I rather liked it, so thanks for the enjoyable read!
Keep up the good work!
- Koki