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8/21/2008 c1 alwaysthereforyou
hey,

I like this one, i've so been there before. If you just adjust a couple of words it might flow better. Maybe take out the first three lines ("2008 2008 Untitled")

and change the next line to "It starts to rain" and then four lines down "it curls my hair" and maybe change the 8th line to "Because I run to loose" Very nice ending i like the imagry of the piece as a whole, it kinda follows the pattern of rain drops. :)
7/4/2008 c1 62Kiwi-kiwi6
Your poems are getting kind of depressing as of late. I like this one, don't get me wrong, but they make me feel like I could do more...
7/3/2008 c1 115Random-Idiocity
Running is a great stress reliever, excellent work. Keep it Up!

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