for Stay Close, Don't Go6/10/2009 c1 teardropsONroses
aw how cute
it sounds like that could be the end but if i read the summary right...
i'd like to know what happens next
it was really good plot wise. the only thing that need improving might be some spelling/grammar type stuff but nothing that was terribly/awful/horrible-ish
aw how cute
it sounds like that could be the end but if i read the summary right...
i'd like to know what happens next
it was really good plot wise. the only thing that need improving might be some spelling/grammar type stuff but nothing that was terribly/awful/horrible-ish
6/2/2009 c1 
1bleedingxrose
Aw...that is really sweet. He must really love her to set that up for her. Good work on it, and please update soon. I'm curious to find out what happens.
1bleedingxroseAw...that is really sweet. He must really love her to set that up for her. Good work on it, and please update soon. I'm curious to find out what happens.
6/2/2009 c1 18FreekyDisaster18
Interesting start. Really can't wait to read more.
Update soon, please!
18FreekyDisaster18Interesting start. Really can't wait to read more.
Update soon, please!
5/18/2009 c1 Foohypink
aw that's so sweet I love it, you have to write more, this is really good. That was like the perfect proposal so perfect! ^_^
aw that's so sweet I love it, you have to write more, this is really good. That was like the perfect proposal so perfect! ^_^
5/11/2009 c1 2ishani acuinatum.ashley
this is a good story...i can feel it...do separate it into smaller paragraphs however...it is easier to read it tht way...
anyway good luck.
2ishani acuinatum.ashleythis is a good story...i can feel it...do separate it into smaller paragraphs however...it is easier to read it tht way...
anyway good luck.
5/10/2009 c1 2Atreyu Legend
Great story, looks like he finally found what he was looking for. Too bad it's about to get worse. kinda depressing.
2Atreyu LegendGreat story, looks like he finally found what he was looking for. Too bad it's about to get worse. kinda depressing.
4/30/2009 c1 9Narq
I liked the narative of this story. It well written with a lot of personality in it. Good work.
9NarqI liked the narative of this story. It well written with a lot of personality in it. Good work.
3/5/2009 c1 Evangeline Curls
wow thanks for the PM it made me feel special. Its like writers really want their readers to recognize them, but sometimes the readers really want to be recognized too..u know? :)
Well, I decided to read some of the stuff you wrote and i have to say that i really like this one. Why have you not updated it yet? The summary was really interesting and the flashback was really sweet (although you tended to repeat a lot of things like spending birthdays/new years/ christmas/etc...you could have said every holiday and the reader would still understand)
Anyway, this is an intersting story. I havn't read you other works yet, but i probably will when i have time. Like maybe this weekend or something. Update this story. its good!
wow thanks for the PM it made me feel special. Its like writers really want their readers to recognize them, but sometimes the readers really want to be recognized too..u know? :)
Well, I decided to read some of the stuff you wrote and i have to say that i really like this one. Why have you not updated it yet? The summary was really interesting and the flashback was really sweet (although you tended to repeat a lot of things like spending birthdays/new years/ christmas/etc...you could have said every holiday and the reader would still understand)
Anyway, this is an intersting story. I havn't read you other works yet, but i probably will when i have time. Like maybe this weekend or something. Update this story. its good!
12/12/2008 c3 7Silencia
this is really good! it has some kind of energy and makes me really wanna read more! Please update soon!
Grtz Silencia
7Silenciathis is really good! it has some kind of energy and makes me really wanna read more! Please update soon!
Grtz Silencia
8/28/2008 c2 5Looking for Bliss
I really like this. It's like he is desperate to move on, but can't because he loves her. So even though he is marrying someone else, he cannot love her the way that he still loves Cassie... It's not fair!
5Looking for BlissI really like this. It's like he is desperate to move on, but can't because he loves her. So even though he is marrying someone else, he cannot love her the way that he still loves Cassie... It's not fair!
8/28/2008 c1 Looking for Bliss
An interesting beginning... I like the way that you have introduced the guilt of what has happened to Cassie. My only point would be the flashback. It breaks the flow when you put 'Flashback' and 'End flashback'. Instead, you could start it by having Rob think back to six years ago, then have his thoughts in italics. Its kinda hard to do, but if you can, it works really well...
An interesting beginning... I like the way that you have introduced the guilt of what has happened to Cassie. My only point would be the flashback. It breaks the flow when you put 'Flashback' and 'End flashback'. Instead, you could start it by having Rob think back to six years ago, then have his thoughts in italics. Its kinda hard to do, but if you can, it works really well...
7/5/2008 c3 6Lynn-Night
Hm well thanks for the mention in this chapter. :) Lol! But I really could find no big mistakes other than a few sentences where you missed putting spaces, but that's no biggy at all. :P Um, but I really liked this chapter, seemed pretty good and all. Though you probably could have expanded on it, like adding in details (you can tell I'm all about the details, eh? :P) about the setting and everything. But I liked how you announced how she felt after coming out of the coma, very nice touch and it makes us feel and know how she feels. You could add in more descriptive word choices but overall, interesting story so far and please update right away! :P
6Lynn-NightHm well thanks for the mention in this chapter. :) Lol! But I really could find no big mistakes other than a few sentences where you missed putting spaces, but that's no biggy at all. :P Um, but I really liked this chapter, seemed pretty good and all. Though you probably could have expanded on it, like adding in details (you can tell I'm all about the details, eh? :P) about the setting and everything. But I liked how you announced how she felt after coming out of the coma, very nice touch and it makes us feel and know how she feels. You could add in more descriptive word choices but overall, interesting story so far and please update right away! :P
7/4/2008 c2 Lynn-Night
Alright first off, you really shouldn't beg people to read your story's in your story summary cause that just makes you look like you're really desperate for people to read your stories. And secondly, I'm liking this story so far but maybe you should start adding details like what your characters look like and where they live, in what time period they live in and stuff like that. Another thing is that your chapters are really short, try expanding on them and, as I said above, add details. But overall you have a really good story going so far so I want you to try to get longer chapters, add details and update soon! :P
Alright first off, you really shouldn't beg people to read your story's in your story summary cause that just makes you look like you're really desperate for people to read your stories. And secondly, I'm liking this story so far but maybe you should start adding details like what your characters look like and where they live, in what time period they live in and stuff like that. Another thing is that your chapters are really short, try expanding on them and, as I said above, add details. But overall you have a really good story going so far so I want you to try to get longer chapters, add details and update soon! :P