for Traffic Lights8/9/2011 c5 
1VortexWings
The plot is really good! :) The characters are also really nicely described. Reminds me of a book that involves gangs. Good job xD
1VortexWingsThe plot is really good! :) The characters are also really nicely described. Reminds me of a book that involves gangs. Good job xD
5/25/2011 c1 16non.graceful
I like this. It was short and gave a brief beginning defining each character and the situation.
16non.gracefulI like this. It was short and gave a brief beginning defining each character and the situation.
6/29/2009 c5 Vividus
Fantastic, really. The grammar mistakes aren't really that noticeable, especially if it was in the dialogue, 'cause some people just talk like that. So yeah. You seem to do well with your characters, too, and their speech patterns. Good job, and good luck!
Fantastic, really. The grammar mistakes aren't really that noticeable, especially if it was in the dialogue, 'cause some people just talk like that. So yeah. You seem to do well with your characters, too, and their speech patterns. Good job, and good luck!
11/27/2008 c5 11acatsrain
This is strange and I don't exactly know what to think of it (not strange in a bad way)... but I hope you update soon so maybe I will.
11acatsrainThis is strange and I don't exactly know what to think of it (not strange in a bad way)... but I hope you update soon so maybe I will.
11/16/2008 c5 20Twilight Starr
That was an interesting chapter. I would be scared out of my mind. Nice work with the interactions between characters. I shall continue reading. Please update soon.
~Twilight Starr
20Twilight StarrThat was an interesting chapter. I would be scared out of my mind. Nice work with the interactions between characters. I shall continue reading. Please update soon.
~Twilight Starr
9/26/2008 c5 AJones
like this story so far, glad i came upon it. waiting for the next chapter :D
like this story so far, glad i came upon it. waiting for the next chapter :D
9/23/2008 c5 il capitano
excellent story so far
the plot line is developing a little slowly i think
and i think that the emotion showed between the father and riley is wavering a bit because sometimes the father is wary of her as if he forces himself to love her and then sometimes you get the impression that he really loves her, so i think that u should clear up their affections for each other (like more loving and caring or more hating and uncertain)
otherwise it is a really good story
its so good that im putting it on my favourites list
sorry for bagging out the story a bit
excellent story so far
the plot line is developing a little slowly i think
and i think that the emotion showed between the father and riley is wavering a bit because sometimes the father is wary of her as if he forces himself to love her and then sometimes you get the impression that he really loves her, so i think that u should clear up their affections for each other (like more loving and caring or more hating and uncertain)
otherwise it is a really good story
its so good that im putting it on my favourites list
sorry for bagging out the story a bit
9/19/2008 c5 Si-Sidera
LOVE IT! Ridge is an interesting character.
But...have you ever seen a guy admit his mistakes like he did?
I haven't.
LOVE IT! Ridge is an interesting character.
But...have you ever seen a guy admit his mistakes like he did?
I haven't.
9/7/2008 c5 Maria
UPDATE/ :D
UPDATE/ :D