for Traffic Lights7/20/2008 c2 
5Number One Dancing Queen
I say that the chapter was just right. And her and her dad part was convincing to me. But anyways thanks for the candy.(eats it) I can't wait for the next chapter. Update soon.
5Number One Dancing QueenI say that the chapter was just right. And her and her dad part was convincing to me. But anyways thanks for the candy.(eats it) I can't wait for the next chapter. Update soon.
7/20/2008 c2 1Sylvia Marri
i think the tension between riley and her father is very convincing, you have my word on that. And her dad seems like a nice enough guy to feel remorseful about what riley went through with her mom. Do you plan on revealing why they got divorced and why riley ended up in her mom's custody?
The premise is interesting. Can't wait to read the part mentioned in the summary. Wonder how ridge took riley's sudden disappearance. Keep this up! I'll be watching out for your updates. =)
1Sylvia Marrii think the tension between riley and her father is very convincing, you have my word on that. And her dad seems like a nice enough guy to feel remorseful about what riley went through with her mom. Do you plan on revealing why they got divorced and why riley ended up in her mom's custody?
The premise is interesting. Can't wait to read the part mentioned in the summary. Wonder how ridge took riley's sudden disappearance. Keep this up! I'll be watching out for your updates. =)
7/20/2008 c2 4Nyleve Nalloc
Hi there. I liked your summary because upon reading the prologue I realized it's Ridge she won't recognize. Might he perhaps have developed into a smoking man? I have the image of a specific actor in my mind for Ridge, but I always misspell his last name so, I will refrain from mentioning it.
The interaction between father and daugher isn't awkward and I thank you for not making her blame him. Hopefully at the end they can get her mother into recovery.
What state does she live in with her dad? (I may have missed that part...)
I would warn you to fix the part about whether or not Riley used drugs because though my guess is she DID - which is why she didn't intefere with her mom's addiction - you have a bit of a confusing sentence there.
I too can't wait for you to move it forward, because it's a promising story.
Also, Florida has pretty shitty schools... I should know... it's my home state. Hopefully Rile's new one isn't as ghetto.
4Nyleve NallocHi there. I liked your summary because upon reading the prologue I realized it's Ridge she won't recognize. Might he perhaps have developed into a smoking man? I have the image of a specific actor in my mind for Ridge, but I always misspell his last name so, I will refrain from mentioning it.
The interaction between father and daugher isn't awkward and I thank you for not making her blame him. Hopefully at the end they can get her mother into recovery.
What state does she live in with her dad? (I may have missed that part...)
I would warn you to fix the part about whether or not Riley used drugs because though my guess is she DID - which is why she didn't intefere with her mom's addiction - you have a bit of a confusing sentence there.
I too can't wait for you to move it forward, because it's a promising story.
Also, Florida has pretty shitty schools... I should know... it's my home state. Hopefully Rile's new one isn't as ghetto.
7/19/2008 c2 4madebeautiful
That was really good. You are a great writer. Everything between Riley and her father was fine too. I have no complaints about anything except I don't know if I can wait for the next chapter. Update soon!
4madebeautifulThat was really good. You are a great writer. Everything between Riley and her father was fine too. I have no complaints about anything except I don't know if I can wait for the next chapter. Update soon!
7/19/2008 c2 2codyismypup
Wow, I was actually really annoyed that this was only up to the second chapter. I love it so far, the main lead guy sounds really interesting.
The interaction between Riley and her dad was a little cliche, but it worked, nontheless.
Can't wait until the next chapter! Update soon!
-RAR
2codyismypupWow, I was actually really annoyed that this was only up to the second chapter. I love it so far, the main lead guy sounds really interesting.
The interaction between Riley and her dad was a little cliche, but it worked, nontheless.
Can't wait until the next chapter! Update soon!
-RAR
7/19/2008 c2 KelseyBell910
Looks good. =] I thought the emotions between the two were very realistic. Continue soon.
Looks good. =] I thought the emotions between the two were very realistic. Continue soon.
7/16/2008 c1 20Twilight Starr
Great beginning. The ending of it was sad. The middle was cute. It was enjoyable to read. Keep writing!
~Twilight Starr~
20Twilight StarrGreat beginning. The ending of it was sad. The middle was cute. It was enjoyable to read. Keep writing!
~Twilight Starr~
7/7/2008 c1 xbrunnettex0
i cant wait for u to update. i love this story so far and its only the first chapter. i hope u update soon!
i cant wait for u to update. i love this story so far and its only the first chapter. i hope u update soon!
7/7/2008 c1 25tornangelwings
ok now you HAVE to continue, i really like where this story is going. i hope you do continue.
thanks
~Duke
25tornangelwingsok now you HAVE to continue, i really like where this story is going. i hope you do continue.
thanks
~Duke