for In The Night We Were Taken
27/8/2008 c1 Selphie-chan
I feel like a whole different review is necessary to tell you.
IT SUCKED. I HATED IT. STOP WRITING.
~_^
Kidding, love. I adored it. It's a really good prologue and I can't wait to read more and find out what happens to Noelle! The beginning almost seems like a child's story, aimed at readers Noelle's age but as it progresses it really takes the shape of a truly dynamic and develop-able story that could captivate even an old hag like me. I can already tell that the characters are complex and the story is far from unoriginal and I can't wait to see more!
I feel like a whole different review is necessary to tell you.
IT SUCKED. I HATED IT. STOP WRITING.
~_^
Kidding, love. I adored it. It's a really good prologue and I can't wait to read more and find out what happens to Noelle! The beginning almost seems like a child's story, aimed at readers Noelle's age but as it progresses it really takes the shape of a truly dynamic and develop-able story that could captivate even an old hag like me. I can already tell that the characters are complex and the story is far from unoriginal and I can't wait to see more!
7/8/2008 c1 Selphie-chan
Here's the rest of my grammar nazi garble. I swear I feel like a total idiot because I'm doubting my view on possessive nouns. I may or not be right but it's worth a double check I guess. Here goes:
When it says Noelle shook with confusion, you shouldn't start two sentences each with the name Noelle, it sounds awkward.
Person in gray's, instead of grays, I think.
Similar situation... same peoples' language? Maybe. I hate possessives XD
Cousin's flailing fists. If I'm wrong I swear I won't take honors english in college .
Here's the rest of my grammar nazi garble. I swear I feel like a total idiot because I'm doubting my view on possessive nouns. I may or not be right but it's worth a double check I guess. Here goes:
When it says Noelle shook with confusion, you shouldn't start two sentences each with the name Noelle, it sounds awkward.
Person in gray's, instead of grays, I think.
Similar situation... same peoples' language? Maybe. I hate possessives XD
Cousin's flailing fists. If I'm wrong I swear I won't take honors english in college .