for The Song: a short story12/23/2008 c2 Stacey672
This is a really touching, emotional story. I was sort of on the verge of tears while reading it. It's ironic that in the very song that took him away from her, he declared his undying love for her. This is a really good story, and it looks like you put a lot more effort into it than meets the eye. Keep on writing!
This is a really touching, emotional story. I was sort of on the verge of tears while reading it. It's ironic that in the very song that took him away from her, he declared his undying love for her. This is a really good story, and it looks like you put a lot more effort into it than meets the eye. Keep on writing!
12/14/2008 c2 Spurlunk
I like this story, it's really nice and sweet and I do enjoy your writing style MUCHO MUCHO but I have two things to say:
1. I feel like there was a book written with this concept. Not the death thing, but the whole very popular song written about me thing. Maybe. I dunno. Anyway, what you wrote is different, so whatever.
2. The last two paragraphs seem so abrupt! It would be very cool to see what happened between Chris's fame and his death! And maybe even have his death inspire her to do ...whatever. Something. I don't know. It's not that your story seems incomplete, it just seems rushed towards the end.
Quite well done though.
I like this story, it's really nice and sweet and I do enjoy your writing style MUCHO MUCHO but I have two things to say:
1. I feel like there was a book written with this concept. Not the death thing, but the whole very popular song written about me thing. Maybe. I dunno. Anyway, what you wrote is different, so whatever.
2. The last two paragraphs seem so abrupt! It would be very cool to see what happened between Chris's fame and his death! And maybe even have his death inspire her to do ...whatever. Something. I don't know. It's not that your story seems incomplete, it just seems rushed towards the end.
Quite well done though.
11/3/2008 c2 
20xxTunstall Chickxx
I loved the revised ending but I preferred the beginning of the unrevised one. New girl in grade 7.
Loved, loved, loved it. I cried. I know, I know, bu I never cry! Truly.
It was really beautiful. i think I liked the unrevised one better, it had more of a raw emotion to it. The revised one hits you less because there is too much new information in it. Sometimes, things are better left plain. But that is my humble opinion. They were both beautiful and awe-inspiring. Hope to read more from you some day.
Keep Writing,
xxTunstall Chickxx
20xxTunstall ChickxxI loved the revised ending but I preferred the beginning of the unrevised one. New girl in grade 7.
Loved, loved, loved it. I cried. I know, I know, bu I never cry! Truly.
It was really beautiful. i think I liked the unrevised one better, it had more of a raw emotion to it. The revised one hits you less because there is too much new information in it. Sometimes, things are better left plain. But that is my humble opinion. They were both beautiful and awe-inspiring. Hope to read more from you some day.
Keep Writing,
xxTunstall Chickxx
7/8/2008 c1 9Phoebe Majere
I actually started crying. :O
Amazing! You're a wonderful author.
Some tiny spelling and grammar, but I'm not a grammar perfectionist either. If you're going to continue with this, I will certainly check in often. If you're not going to, I just want to say that I loved this story and that whatever anybody says to you doesn't get you down. :D
9Phoebe MajereI actually started crying. :O
Amazing! You're a wonderful author.
Some tiny spelling and grammar, but I'm not a grammar perfectionist either. If you're going to continue with this, I will certainly check in often. If you're not going to, I just want to say that I loved this story and that whatever anybody says to you doesn't get you down. :D