for dead astronauts in space11/2/2008 c1 
189oxytocin
My favourite thing about you is your imagination. I just know you have so many brilliant ideas in there.
189oxytocinMy favourite thing about you is your imagination. I just know you have so many brilliant ideas in there.
7/28/2008 c1 Ernest Bloom
I see what you mean about hallucinations. Dead astronauts seems a red herring. I'm pretty sure you've got a mouse problem.
I see what you mean about hallucinations. Dead astronauts seems a red herring. I'm pretty sure you've got a mouse problem.
7/19/2008 c1 612simpleplan13
Your alliteration in the first two lines was really great, it worked well with the fact that you were talking about sounds.
I love the ending as well, it's a great description of the dark and very very true.
The piece was nice, it flowed well and your descriptions were nicely done.
PS If your bored check out the Review Game and/or it's Review Marathon (link in my profile).
612simpleplan13Your alliteration in the first two lines was really great, it worked well with the fact that you were talking about sounds.
I love the ending as well, it's a great description of the dark and very very true.
The piece was nice, it flowed well and your descriptions were nicely done.
PS If your bored check out the Review Game and/or it's Review Marathon (link in my profile).
7/14/2008 c1 57empathic life
This is the trouble with reviewing. I get this weird tendency to review everything by someone if I review anything. But I'm sure you're not complaining.
Now, with this one I have no complaints about the length. It was fitting. Honestly, I'm struggling to find something I don't like... I love your word choice. You know how to use the pretty ones in the right way. I got a little confused with the little people bit, but I loved it all the same, and figure my confusion is failure on the reader's part more than the author's. ^^
Anyway. Gorgeous, gorgeous poem.
57empathic lifeThis is the trouble with reviewing. I get this weird tendency to review everything by someone if I review anything. But I'm sure you're not complaining.
Now, with this one I have no complaints about the length. It was fitting. Honestly, I'm struggling to find something I don't like... I love your word choice. You know how to use the pretty ones in the right way. I got a little confused with the little people bit, but I loved it all the same, and figure my confusion is failure on the reader's part more than the author's. ^^
Anyway. Gorgeous, gorgeous poem.
7/13/2008 c1 836CRaZy-OdIN
the flow is perfect and it has a very eerie, but once again masterfuly done! :) keep it up!
836CRaZy-OdINthe flow is perfect and it has a very eerie, but once again masterfuly done! :) keep it up!
7/12/2008 c1 7signpost
Dude, this is what you were doing when we were on the phone? Fuck it's 6:12 AM and i'm typing you a bloody review.
I love this because i love Manson and i want an austronaut boyfriend. Oh yeah and your descriptions remind me eerily of Oompa Loompas. Fantastic.
By the by, TELL ME EVERY TIME YOU WRITE SOMETHING so that i don't have to visit your page every day to check.
7signpostDude, this is what you were doing when we were on the phone? Fuck it's 6:12 AM and i'm typing you a bloody review.
I love this because i love Manson and i want an austronaut boyfriend. Oh yeah and your descriptions remind me eerily of Oompa Loompas. Fantastic.
By the by, TELL ME EVERY TIME YOU WRITE SOMETHING so that i don't have to visit your page every day to check.
7/12/2008 c1 233siphoned afterglow
i don't know what it is about this that i like but its beautiful. in a way, there seems to be some hurt pouring out of the words especially the last three lines. i could have so many interpretations for this, but it may be way off from yours. i find this piece amazing.
keep it up.
could you tell me your interprtaion for this?
233siphoned afterglowi don't know what it is about this that i like but its beautiful. in a way, there seems to be some hurt pouring out of the words especially the last three lines. i could have so many interpretations for this, but it may be way off from yours. i find this piece amazing.
keep it up.
could you tell me your interprtaion for this?
7/11/2008 c1 83Prevaricate
the "pitter-patter... flitter" consonance is very engaging, a nice way to start things off... definitely a relatable piece. the only thing that makes it a little rough is the very first comma; it isn't necessary and throws the rhythm off a bit.
nice work.
83Prevaricatethe "pitter-patter... flitter" consonance is very engaging, a nice way to start things off... definitely a relatable piece. the only thing that makes it a little rough is the very first comma; it isn't necessary and throws the rhythm off a bit.
nice work.