for The Fall of Light8/13/2008 c9 
1Anna Y.C
hello I really like this series sorry I haven't reviewed before but work has caught up on me. The main spelling errors are the part when Seph starts tinking apout Hades lips right after the carriage side insident with Charon. Just within three paragraphs if I'm not mistaken. Oh I can't wait for the next chapter. I love romances and greek mythology. Hades and Charon and all the other male gods seem so much more handsome after this. The humour is good and the suspense is quite there. I'll check those drawings out, I love art.
1Anna Y.Chello I really like this series sorry I haven't reviewed before but work has caught up on me. The main spelling errors are the part when Seph starts tinking apout Hades lips right after the carriage side insident with Charon. Just within three paragraphs if I'm not mistaken. Oh I can't wait for the next chapter. I love romances and greek mythology. Hades and Charon and all the other male gods seem so much more handsome after this. The humour is good and the suspense is quite there. I'll check those drawings out, I love art.
8/11/2008 c9 iamnolongerusingthisaccount
it was to short! I wanted to know what happened next! please update soon! I love your story!
it was to short! I wanted to know what happened next! please update soon! I love your story!
8/7/2008 c8 82Isabella22
What a tease. *sour face*
I want more! I read your chapters entirely too quickly. It's not fair!
Update pronto. :( I need more Persephone/Hades.
82Isabella22What a tease. *sour face*
I want more! I read your chapters entirely too quickly. It's not fair!
Update pronto. :( I need more Persephone/Hades.
8/7/2008 c8 iamnolongerusingthisaccount
grr...I wish it was longer! Please, update as soon as you can!
grr...I wish it was longer! Please, update as soon as you can!
8/5/2008 c7 AubriannaKnight
M...I like the idea behind this story. Chapters could be a bit more detailed. There are parts that confused me.For example the time frame in the following parts, made me wonder if it is still meeting time when the last part happens.
"Hestia ran to the stage at Hades, but he ignored her and knelt down next to Persephone, “Thank you, omorfi koppella.”
She blushed as Hades brushed his lips against the back of her hand and his mentioning that she was beautiful in their native tongue.
“Why didn’t you do anything earlier?” Zeus roared at his older brother.
Poseidon snorted, “What, and get that stupid sword pointed at me? I don’t think so!” He fixed his crown and straightened it on his head."from that area down It seemed like it was all happenning at the same time, but then this sentence cofused me. "The golden gates to the throne room groaned as Demeter entered, followed by Persephone. The young Goddess had her head bowed with her hands clasped tightly together in front of her."
Why would they be entering when they are already there, and if it's later in the day when did the time change?
Other than that.. Update soon! :)
M...I like the idea behind this story. Chapters could be a bit more detailed. There are parts that confused me.For example the time frame in the following parts, made me wonder if it is still meeting time when the last part happens.
"Hestia ran to the stage at Hades, but he ignored her and knelt down next to Persephone, “Thank you, omorfi koppella.”
She blushed as Hades brushed his lips against the back of her hand and his mentioning that she was beautiful in their native tongue.
“Why didn’t you do anything earlier?” Zeus roared at his older brother.
Poseidon snorted, “What, and get that stupid sword pointed at me? I don’t think so!” He fixed his crown and straightened it on his head."from that area down It seemed like it was all happenning at the same time, but then this sentence cofused me. "The golden gates to the throne room groaned as Demeter entered, followed by Persephone. The young Goddess had her head bowed with her hands clasped tightly together in front of her."
Why would they be entering when they are already there, and if it's later in the day when did the time change?
Other than that.. Update soon! :)
8/4/2008 c7 Isabella22
Lol Zeus acts like spoiled brat. I hope he gets something coming to him...
Persephone/Hades more interaction PLEASE!
I bet she's gonna defy the council and go meet him later.
Update soon! I can't wait!
Lol Zeus acts like spoiled brat. I hope he gets something coming to him...
Persephone/Hades more interaction PLEASE!
I bet she's gonna defy the council and go meet him later.
Update soon! I can't wait!
8/4/2008 c6 Isabella22
I am absolutely in love with this story! I can't wait for you to update! Keep writing!
I am absolutely in love with this story! I can't wait for you to update! Keep writing!
8/2/2008 c6 1Anna Y.C
I heart this series of stories. I personally admire all the greek goddesses and gods in their statues and influence on people. This rendition of them in a humerous fashion and having human fits of pettiness is delightful. I'm new to fictionpress and i'm thinking of making my first story to be about Hecate, thanks for making me laugh!
It is a little strange though to see the gods in this fashion, most obviously, Zeus. I suppose its your method to convey your comedy but it will help to bring in a little more of the actual importance of the positions and roles of the gods although you did do your research for their names and relationships to the other gods and goddesses. forgive my spelling, there are just a few grammar mistakes here and there, keep it up!
All the best for Hades, man, why do you have to make him a romantic! giggles*
1Anna Y.CI heart this series of stories. I personally admire all the greek goddesses and gods in their statues and influence on people. This rendition of them in a humerous fashion and having human fits of pettiness is delightful. I'm new to fictionpress and i'm thinking of making my first story to be about Hecate, thanks for making me laugh!
It is a little strange though to see the gods in this fashion, most obviously, Zeus. I suppose its your method to convey your comedy but it will help to bring in a little more of the actual importance of the positions and roles of the gods although you did do your research for their names and relationships to the other gods and goddesses. forgive my spelling, there are just a few grammar mistakes here and there, keep it up!
All the best for Hades, man, why do you have to make him a romantic! giggles*
8/1/2008 c1 iamnolongerusingthisaccount
um..did you mean its? "it put strain on Chaos" I was just trying to help, great story by the way.
um..did you mean its? "it put strain on Chaos" I was just trying to help, great story by the way.