for The silence that follows7/28/2008 c15 navajo
i loved how it ended wonderful story i give you a stand ovation...lol...but what happened with seths brother drake?
i loved how it ended wonderful story i give you a stand ovation...lol...but what happened with seths brother drake?
7/27/2008 c13 crystal balle
No! Go away, Mr. Foster! And pleasepleaseplease tell me that Seth isn't dead. That would end the story, right? And that would be bad? But your reply to my last comment made me worry that he would. The story has to end with Alex and Seth all happy and lovey. Having a boyfriend as a bodyguard is an absolutely amazing idea. It seems super sweet that he cares about him so much that he'd be his bodyguard.
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No! Go away, Mr. Foster! And pleasepleaseplease tell me that Seth isn't dead. That would end the story, right? And that would be bad? But your reply to my last comment made me worry that he would. The story has to end with Alex and Seth all happy and lovey. Having a boyfriend as a bodyguard is an absolutely amazing idea. It seems super sweet that he cares about him so much that he'd be his bodyguard.
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7/27/2008 c13 
2Dancer.In.The.Rain
NO...SETH CANT DIE. I hope Seth makes it. This story just keeps getting better and better cant wait for the next chapter.
2Dancer.In.The.RainNO...SETH CANT DIE. I hope Seth makes it. This story just keeps getting better and better cant wait for the next chapter.
7/27/2008 c12 By Design Juliet
...Seth...is gonna die?
I'm moving onto the next chapter. I have to find out what's going on.
...Seth...is gonna die?
I'm moving onto the next chapter. I have to find out what's going on.
7/27/2008 c11 By Design Juliet
Take out the 'butt' in the bit where Seth is lubing hi up ( 'butt hole') and I think the scene will go smoother. I stumbled over it before forcing myself t ignore it.
Take out the 'butt' in the bit where Seth is lubing hi up ( 'butt hole') and I think the scene will go smoother. I stumbled over it before forcing myself t ignore it.
7/27/2008 c9 By Design Juliet
Go Marie! W00t!
That part felt hurried and blunt, but as I don't know more about her, I can't say whether that's her style or not.
Go Marie! W00t!
That part felt hurried and blunt, but as I don't know more about her, I can't say whether that's her style or not.
7/27/2008 c13 1They Call Me Soysauce
Die! Die you asshole! *cuts off Alex's dad's head*
Seth has to be okay! He just HAS to! ;~;
(And no! The end is near! T.T)
1They Call Me SoysauceDie! Die you asshole! *cuts off Alex's dad's head*
Seth has to be okay! He just HAS to! ;~;
(And no! The end is near! T.T)
7/27/2008 c7 By Design Juliet
GAH. I wanna know what happens!
Mm. Nothing to say bad about this chapter; you're doing good.
GAH. I wanna know what happens!
Mm. Nothing to say bad about this chapter; you're doing good.
7/27/2008 c6 By Design Juliet
Hmm. The art part is a little odd, but that's just ebcause I've seen it so many times.
The bathroom scene is a little rushed, it feels, and I had a hard time keeping track of it, but other than that it's great.
Hmm. The art part is a little odd, but that's just ebcause I've seen it so many times.
The bathroom scene is a little rushed, it feels, and I had a hard time keeping track of it, but other than that it's great.
7/27/2008 c5 By Design Juliet
Smexy first kiss! Yay!
I'm picking up hints of Seth's past right now; you're pretty good at dropping hints.
Smexy first kiss! Yay!
I'm picking up hints of Seth's past right now; you're pretty good at dropping hints.
7/27/2008 c4 By Design Juliet
It's progressing well; I've only got one comment: You jumped from Alex like/not-liking Seth to the phone call, and I think that could use a bit more transition.
It's progressing well; I've only got one comment: You jumped from Alex like/not-liking Seth to the phone call, and I think that could use a bit more transition.