for Moments Like That7/24/2008 c1 Needa S
Sad in a way but an awesome write just the same. Could work as a song also. Write on!
Sad in a way but an awesome write just the same. Could work as a song also. Write on!
7/19/2008 c1 
612simpleplan13
FP messed up an repeated your first line twice.
I think you went comma crazy in the piece. I think maybe some more periods of semi-colons might work well in the piece.
I like how you go through the different years and change a little bit, but repeat the rest of it. It added something to the piece and the progression.
The piece was really sweet and relateable. Nicely done.
PS If you're bored check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (link in my profile).
612simpleplan13FP messed up an repeated your first line twice.
I think you went comma crazy in the piece. I think maybe some more periods of semi-colons might work well in the piece.
I like how you go through the different years and change a little bit, but repeat the rest of it. It added something to the piece and the progression.
The piece was really sweet and relateable. Nicely done.
PS If you're bored check out the Review Game and/or its Review Marathon (link in my profile).