for The Hall of Kings11/4/2014 c1 cassie
This looks very promising! I am interested to see where you take these characters and this idea.
This looks very promising! I am interested to see where you take these characters and this idea.
11/24/2011 c1 
3Identification Please
This is really rather good. I was intrigued by the summary and I was not disapointed. Please keep writing and updating. You can take this story places.
3Identification PleaseThis is really rather good. I was intrigued by the summary and I was not disapointed. Please keep writing and updating. You can take this story places.
9/17/2011 c1 8DorkExpress
That's it? No more chapters? Oh, well, that sucks. I really wanted to knkw what was happening next. Do you think you can send me the next chapter please?
XOXO
8DorkExpressThat's it? No more chapters? Oh, well, that sucks. I really wanted to knkw what was happening next. Do you think you can send me the next chapter please?
XOXO
12/31/2008 c1 4S. E. K. Arouet
The premise of your story is interesting and I'd love to hear more about the world you've created here. The only thing that distracts from the good quality of your writing is the many punctuation mistakes, especially at the beginning of the chapter. There are quite a few run-on sentences and places where there should be commas. A quick run through with an eye towards catching these mistakes would make reading this chapter even more enjoyable.
I am interested in where this story goes and hope that you will indeed post more of it. Please keep in mind that the more chapters you post, the more readers, and thus reviews, you will acquire.
Best of luck.
S.
4S. E. K. ArouetThe premise of your story is interesting and I'd love to hear more about the world you've created here. The only thing that distracts from the good quality of your writing is the many punctuation mistakes, especially at the beginning of the chapter. There are quite a few run-on sentences and places where there should be commas. A quick run through with an eye towards catching these mistakes would make reading this chapter even more enjoyable.
I am interested in where this story goes and hope that you will indeed post more of it. Please keep in mind that the more chapters you post, the more readers, and thus reviews, you will acquire.
Best of luck.
S.
9/15/2008 c1 fairy Eva
Bah! I really like this! I hope you're planning on adding more chapters soon. Jo seems pretty kick-ass, and I'm a little curious about Rael. Please update soon!
Bah! I really like this! I hope you're planning on adding more chapters soon. Jo seems pretty kick-ass, and I'm a little curious about Rael. Please update soon!
9/7/2008 c1 5hi-tanner85
I saw you had reviewed my story Lucian Boom and I was just coming by to say thank you but the summary for this story caught my attention and let me just say, I love it. I'm already hooked and it's already going on my favorites cause it's exactly the kind of thing I LOVE to read. I'm so happy there's something new and good to read.
Fiction press has been lacking with the updates lately. grr.
Thanks for this.
Brittanyterese.
5hi-tanner85I saw you had reviewed my story Lucian Boom and I was just coming by to say thank you but the summary for this story caught my attention and let me just say, I love it. I'm already hooked and it's already going on my favorites cause it's exactly the kind of thing I LOVE to read. I'm so happy there's something new and good to read.
Fiction press has been lacking with the updates lately. grr.
Thanks for this.
Brittanyterese.
7/21/2008 c1 12Clela
Ooh, interesting beginning. I want to know what happens next, and more about the world you've created.
12ClelaOoh, interesting beginning. I want to know what happens next, and more about the world you've created.
7/20/2008 c1 4Halfbloodprincess17
It was really good, I would really like to read more of it. It's intriguing enough to catch my interest.
4Halfbloodprincess17It was really good, I would really like to read more of it. It's intriguing enough to catch my interest.