for Taken What Was Never Mine1/16/2009 c1 
11La Demoiselle Aline
"Everything we seek to gain will never reside in our hands,
We conceive but nothing is done for us,
Life isn’t a pretension, "
That is a very clever *stanza, this poem really got me thinking when I read it. I love your poems, there's so much pathos in them :)
Maralie
*I hope stanza is a a couple of lines, isn't it? I need to brush up on my poetry
11La Demoiselle Aline"Everything we seek to gain will never reside in our hands,
We conceive but nothing is done for us,
Life isn’t a pretension, "
That is a very clever *stanza, this poem really got me thinking when I read it. I love your poems, there's so much pathos in them :)
Maralie
*I hope stanza is a a couple of lines, isn't it? I need to brush up on my poetry
10/12/2008 c1 20Grey of Solitude
This poem is so true and reminds me of myself. /laughs/ I love the last line of the poem. You have awesome vocabulary by the way.
20Grey of SolitudeThis poem is so true and reminds me of myself. /laughs/ I love the last line of the poem. You have awesome vocabulary by the way.
8/9/2008 c1 43lookin4nemo
lurid...Mr.balck...I am crying. This is amazing! It's so truthful and amazing and should be published! You are a true artist and poet. I kiss the ground at your feet because I envy your talent so much. Now all i hgave to do is look up all those words. I get the basic idea. And this is truley amazing. o my lord such talent and such truth. Someday i'll see your work in a book and i'll go:"YEAH I REVIEWED THAT KID!" and it's truley amazing Mr.Black. I can not get over it. I must ask... what is your inspiration? you better keep writing lurid. And i will certaintly keep reading even if you stop reviewing my poems.
~Nemo~
43lookin4nemolurid...Mr.balck...I am crying. This is amazing! It's so truthful and amazing and should be published! You are a true artist and poet. I kiss the ground at your feet because I envy your talent so much. Now all i hgave to do is look up all those words. I get the basic idea. And this is truley amazing. o my lord such talent and such truth. Someday i'll see your work in a book and i'll go:"YEAH I REVIEWED THAT KID!" and it's truley amazing Mr.Black. I can not get over it. I must ask... what is your inspiration? you better keep writing lurid. And i will certaintly keep reading even if you stop reviewing my poems.
~Nemo~
8/8/2008 c1 10Koki Enwai
Quite powerful. I really loved the vocabulary of this. It felt like every line seeped into me and really came alive. Great work. You've got serious talent.
- Koki
10Koki EnwaiQuite powerful. I really loved the vocabulary of this. It felt like every line seeped into me and really came alive. Great work. You've got serious talent.
- Koki
8/4/2008 c1 76Kaia Zeffirelli
Wow. Absolutely amazing as always! Love the line, "Life obeys no intention or destiny." Great job- keep it up- it was great to read something of yours again =)
-Katrina
76Kaia ZeffirelliWow. Absolutely amazing as always! Love the line, "Life obeys no intention or destiny." Great job- keep it up- it was great to read something of yours again =)
-Katrina
8/1/2008 c1 82Billie.Joelle
Ah, lurid. Glad to see you back, though I haven't been here much myself. Amazing as always. Keeps you entranced, and you don't want it to end. Lovely, lovely, lovely. Keep 'em coming!
~BJ
82Billie.JoelleAh, lurid. Glad to see you back, though I haven't been here much myself. Amazing as always. Keeps you entranced, and you don't want it to end. Lovely, lovely, lovely. Keep 'em coming!
~BJ
7/29/2008 c1 612simpleplan13
"The distress you keep for ever trying"...forever
You have some really wonderful word choice in there with "acrid" and "onerous." I also like how most of it is questions and then the ending tells us we need to ask ourselves the questions, that ties the whole thing up really well. I also like a lot of your descriptions and your punctuation is correct as well (which is great). Really nice job. Glad to see you writing again!
612simpleplan13"The distress you keep for ever trying"...forever
You have some really wonderful word choice in there with "acrid" and "onerous." I also like how most of it is questions and then the ending tells us we need to ask ourselves the questions, that ties the whole thing up really well. I also like a lot of your descriptions and your punctuation is correct as well (which is great). Really nice job. Glad to see you writing again!