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1/24/2009 c1 3Jaye-Elle
Beautiful and tragic, a fantastic combination.

The way each stanza flows, in sort of an ebb/flow, is well done. It's the diction that makes this piece amazing though.

"i am but a hollowed bird

lifting my beak’s

unpractised spoon

to sip his silence"

Absolutely great. The hard 's' repition and all. Love it.

- Jay

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