for The Ball Field11/27/2008 c1 
9MagicWords
Hm, interesting story so far. Sort of reminds me of "A league of their Own"
the movie...
Anyways, its a different sort of story that i hope you continue.
9MagicWordsHm, interesting story so far. Sort of reminds me of "A league of their Own"
the movie...
Anyways, its a different sort of story that i hope you continue.
8/13/2008 c2 3BeautyisFleeting
Amazing story! I love the relationship between the girls :D I can't wait to read more :D
Update soon!
3BeautyisFleetingAmazing story! I love the relationship between the girls :D I can't wait to read more :D
Update soon!
7/31/2008 c1 5BenWireman
your writing stile is crap you need some advice! i will give you some, go do somthing else you were not ment to write! LOL jk jk it was great julia!
5BenWiremanyour writing stile is crap you need some advice! i will give you some, go do somthing else you were not ment to write! LOL jk jk it was great julia!
7/31/2008 c1 Zoey McCusker
Very nice beginning! I like the expected character flaws in Rachel, oddly enough, b/c they make the person interesting. I especially like the intro.
And, you should be happy to hear, I did not notice any gramatical errors!
Now you know you did well!
Very nice beginning! I like the expected character flaws in Rachel, oddly enough, b/c they make the person interesting. I especially like the intro.
And, you should be happy to hear, I did not notice any gramatical errors!
Now you know you did well!