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3/16/2009 c13 SkierSuz
it good for a filler chapter it needs more excitment
3/16/2009 c13 angie
well done great chapter.update quicker if you can thanks.ben did come over more likeable,loveable in this chapter
3/16/2009 c13 Jezebel Montgomery
I think it's working. If anyone is questioning the legitimacy of their relationship, I think the blame lies in Karen's inability to open up or trust; not in Ben's character. Keep up the good work.

-Jez
3/3/2009 c12 shvesta
OMG! I love it so far, BUT, I think the story would be better if you lay off the romance a little bit and focus a little more on the story. Sometimes you skip scenes that I want to read about, and include scenes that are just repeating over and over. No I am not bothered by the lemon, but I think, maybe without realizing it, you made Ben seem kinda player-ish and just out for her body. Obviously, I'm sure this wasn't your intention, but you haven't given him much depth as a person, or as a character. However, I think the detail you give to the actual cars racing is phenomenal. I LOVE THIS STORY!

Hope this was somewhat helpful.

~HiPpOoFdOoM~
2/26/2009 c12 bob
love it...!
2/24/2009 c12 SkierSuz
love it i cant wait for next chapter
2/21/2009 c12 starbucks.addiction
I'm definitely in love with this story. Keep up the awesomeness!
2/21/2009 c12 renroy
I really like the chapter. Their wasn't as much action as i imagine but i can understand your reason. But don't worry the story is still very gd

xox-ren-xox
2/20/2009 c12 Rachel
Hi. Good chapter. Can't wait to see what happens next. The last chapter was good, too by the way.
2/20/2009 c12 4WhataLovelyPenName
hey, i'm excited that she's finally in the whole upper ring of the street racers. it's exciting. :P

my condolences for your death. :(
2/20/2009 c12 KelseyBell910
Really good chapter! Continue soon.
2/20/2009 c12 angie
this is one my favourite stories here.well done.update soon ca't wait to see what happens next.thanks
2/20/2009 c12 1buffyeesummers
What is going to happen at nine o'clock?...such suspense.

Looking forward to your next update! How many chapters are you planning?

p.s. Was the 'Paul Walker' just a coincidence, or are you playing on 'Fast and the Furious'?
2/20/2009 c12 Isabellamarie
I love this story : ) ben and her are so cute
2/20/2009 c12 fantasy4luvr
great chapter! i really liked it
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