for In Cadence9/7/2008 c4 
13Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu
Well, interesting chapter since I've got to see certain aspects of character developments here. This story is really getting more interesting and I wonder how this whole thing wil turn out.
13Tsumujikaze no SoujutsuWell, interesting chapter since I've got to see certain aspects of character developments here. This story is really getting more interesting and I wonder how this whole thing wil turn out.
8/28/2008 c3 Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu
Well, interesting chapter here with all the issue of insights. I really like the way you create the world in this chapter. For some weird reason, it reminds me of the Emerald Dream from Warcraft. :D And I assume that this chapter will play a major part in the story, huh? Well, basically just one issue I want to raise up and that is paragraphing. Basically, I do find that you've clustered quite a bit into one single paragraph. I'll suggest that you can break the bigger paragraphs into smaller ones. In that way, the whole story will be more easier to read. :) Apart from that, nothing to say.
Well, interesting chapter here with all the issue of insights. I really like the way you create the world in this chapter. For some weird reason, it reminds me of the Emerald Dream from Warcraft. :D And I assume that this chapter will play a major part in the story, huh? Well, basically just one issue I want to raise up and that is paragraphing. Basically, I do find that you've clustered quite a bit into one single paragraph. I'll suggest that you can break the bigger paragraphs into smaller ones. In that way, the whole story will be more easier to read. :) Apart from that, nothing to say.
8/26/2008 c2 Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu
Heya there! It's me lol! :D Anyway, thanks very much for your review on Circles of Arven. So now on with the review. Ok, I can see that this story has a potential to be a good one. I don't know anything about the online game you've mentioned, but if you want to base your plot on it, then I'll have to say be careful because someone may see the whole thing out and flame you. I, for one, dislike flamers and I think you also hold the same view. What I'm trying to say though is that maybe you can find ways and means to create plot twists that would be beyond the scope of the game plot. That's all I can say CC wise. But I'll have to admit that this story is a good one although I've never played the online game you've mentioned. Also, I'll be interested to see if you can incorporate the whole issue of godhood here since I'm curious about that. As for the ending phrase, I really like it. It really has the feel of unknown here. OK, I guess I've said enough. Thanks again for your review on Circles of ARven and hope to see more of the reviews soon! ^^ Bye! :)
Heya there! It's me lol! :D Anyway, thanks very much for your review on Circles of Arven. So now on with the review. Ok, I can see that this story has a potential to be a good one. I don't know anything about the online game you've mentioned, but if you want to base your plot on it, then I'll have to say be careful because someone may see the whole thing out and flame you. I, for one, dislike flamers and I think you also hold the same view. What I'm trying to say though is that maybe you can find ways and means to create plot twists that would be beyond the scope of the game plot. That's all I can say CC wise. But I'll have to admit that this story is a good one although I've never played the online game you've mentioned. Also, I'll be interested to see if you can incorporate the whole issue of godhood here since I'm curious about that. As for the ending phrase, I really like it. It really has the feel of unknown here. OK, I guess I've said enough. Thanks again for your review on Circles of ARven and hope to see more of the reviews soon! ^^ Bye! :)
8/4/2008 c4 10Koki Enwai
I'm definitely liking this so far. Really well done. I especially like the imagery. You have a way with words.
Looking forward to more!
- Koki
10Koki EnwaiI'm definitely liking this so far. Really well done. I especially like the imagery. You have a way with words.
Looking forward to more!
- Koki