for Fall For You8/28/2008 c11 mado
great chapter, although i thought she would be more upset over dylan even if he is a bastard. a! and i want anna/beau moment!
thank you
great chapter, although i thought she would be more upset over dylan even if he is a bastard. a! and i want anna/beau moment!
thank you
8/28/2008 c1 loveiswhyicamehere
I feel like Beau and Anna Mesh well together. Anyone Else Agree. I Really would love to see some kissing action between them...SOON
I feel like Beau and Anna Mesh well together. Anyone Else Agree. I Really would love to see some kissing action between them...SOON
8/28/2008 c11 
20xxTunstall Chickxx
Ooh, UPDATE SOON! Loved it, very nicely written.
Keep Writing,
xxTunstall Chickxx
20xxTunstall ChickxxOoh, UPDATE SOON! Loved it, very nicely written.
Keep Writing,
xxTunstall Chickxx
8/28/2008 c11 1Writing4Eternity
I totally saw that coming. :-)! I know a song you can use but I'm using it for one of my stories. So i'll give you my second choice. Howie Day-Collide
1Writing4EternityI totally saw that coming. :-)! I know a song you can use but I'm using it for one of my stories. So i'll give you my second choice. Howie Day-Collide
8/28/2008 c11 hcjbsu
YOU NAILED IT! I did NOT see that coming!wow! gOOD JOB! I liked the twist (obviously!) and I liked how realisticly Anna acted AFTER the breakup. When she went on a "rebound" and thought a bout Beau. As you know though I always leave my suggestions and criticism. So, here we go. 1) The twist was good, but wouldn't Anna be more upset when she finds out, (wouldn't you?),and Dylan more angry when she told the "protectors". 2)There was a lot of dialouge still, which as you know is fine, but you need to find a balance between dialouge and everything else. 3) Lastly, you lost description. You described her in the bathroom, and then Beau in the car. Sure there were few other things, but make sure you keep up the description consistent.
Despite all of the criticism I LOVED IT! I can't wait for chapter 12!
YOU NAILED IT! I did NOT see that coming!wow! gOOD JOB! I liked the twist (obviously!) and I liked how realisticly Anna acted AFTER the breakup. When she went on a "rebound" and thought a bout Beau. As you know though I always leave my suggestions and criticism. So, here we go. 1) The twist was good, but wouldn't Anna be more upset when she finds out, (wouldn't you?),and Dylan more angry when she told the "protectors". 2)There was a lot of dialouge still, which as you know is fine, but you need to find a balance between dialouge and everything else. 3) Lastly, you lost description. You described her in the bathroom, and then Beau in the car. Sure there were few other things, but make sure you keep up the description consistent.
Despite all of the criticism I LOVED IT! I can't wait for chapter 12!
8/27/2008 c10 2ties.are.great.belts
OMG! i was close! YAY! So, this was great, even though Dylan's a TOTAL douche bag... So, yeah, you need to update soon, and i will go vote in your poll, since I KNOW who i want Anna to be with... o.o... Again, great chapter!
2ties.are.great.beltsOMG! i was close! YAY! So, this was great, even though Dylan's a TOTAL douche bag... So, yeah, you need to update soon, and i will go vote in your poll, since I KNOW who i want Anna to be with... o.o... Again, great chapter!
8/27/2008 c10 1Writing4Eternity
I don't know what to feel about this story. It's extremely cliche(I love cliches)but at the same time it's a bit annoying. Anyway, I like Beau for her. I was really hoping this wouldn't be one of 'those' stories with love triangles. I guess I kind of like the story though.
1Writing4EternityI don't know what to feel about this story. It's extremely cliche(I love cliches)but at the same time it's a bit annoying. Anyway, I like Beau for her. I was really hoping this wouldn't be one of 'those' stories with love triangles. I guess I kind of like the story though.
8/27/2008 c10 1hollister.ae.love
alright. im not going to lie.
this is amazing.
i hope you finsih this one day and have it published.
1hollister.ae.lovealright. im not going to lie.
this is amazing.
i hope you finsih this one day and have it published.
8/26/2008 c10 Spurlunk
Wow. Dylan's a jerk? No offense, but you should have planted a few hints in Dylan's behavior, not just what Matt and Beau said. Unless he turns out to be 'good' after all. And you need to develop Justin's character more. And also, the group of friends you introduced? That paragraph is kind of confusing. Maybe you introduced too many at once? Otherwise, very cool chapter. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Oh, how do you get so many people to review your stories? lol I need more reviewers on mine!
Wow. Dylan's a jerk? No offense, but you should have planted a few hints in Dylan's behavior, not just what Matt and Beau said. Unless he turns out to be 'good' after all. And you need to develop Justin's character more. And also, the group of friends you introduced? That paragraph is kind of confusing. Maybe you introduced too many at once? Otherwise, very cool chapter. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Oh, how do you get so many people to review your stories? lol I need more reviewers on mine!
8/26/2008 c10 11Seisaset
ah finally what dylan is up to... what a creeper. as for the poll i'm all justin :)
11Seisasetah finally what dylan is up to... what a creeper. as for the poll i'm all justin :)
8/26/2008 c3 princessarielle3
I Love When Beau In Chapter 3 Thinks : He was going to have his hands all over MY girl. teehee so cute Anna and Beau Sitting In A Tree K.I.S.S.I.N.G
I Love When Beau In Chapter 3 Thinks : He was going to have his hands all over MY girl. teehee so cute Anna and Beau Sitting In A Tree K.I.S.S.I.N.G