for Little Less Obvious10/2/2018 c1 BeautyOnFyre
It is criminal that this story doesn’t have more comments, likes and overall exposure. I read this story for the first time 10 years ago and it’s still a favorite. It’s what got me into writing fiction online.
Many kudos and thanks for your literary gift.
It is criminal that this story doesn’t have more comments, likes and overall exposure. I read this story for the first time 10 years ago and it’s still a favorite. It’s what got me into writing fiction online.
Many kudos and thanks for your literary gift.
7/1/2017 c7 Guest
This story is AMAZING! Specially this chapter! Gah!
HopelesslyInLove
This story is AMAZING! Specially this chapter! Gah!
HopelesslyInLove
6/27/2017 c36 Guest
Wow
Amazing character development, you had likeable characters with their own flaws and I appreciate that. I think you protrayed the idea of a human accurately, you're amazing and I just really want to give you a big awesome hug right now.
Wow
Amazing character development, you had likeable characters with their own flaws and I appreciate that. I think you protrayed the idea of a human accurately, you're amazing and I just really want to give you a big awesome hug right now.
2/24/2017 c36 Guest
It os abdouletly beutiful. CONGRATS
It os abdouletly beutiful. CONGRATS
7/16/2016 c36 Guest
your story ...it's so cute! I adore it!
your story ...it's so cute! I adore it!
755/20/2016 c36 anonymous
Hey there!
I really liked your story! How you drew out the characters, the plot,...
The thing I stumbled over, was the car Keri got Alex. Maybe its because Im from Europe and a car has somehow a different meaning than in the US... How much do you pay for a car in the US?
Here its not that common to get a car, when you got your drivers license and most of the students - even in university - are taking the bus/train/bike/their own feet. Spending thousands - or even hundreds - of dollars on a birthday present seems way past generosity ans is a little bit exaggerated. It just doesnt seems realistic to me. Keri works two jobs and saves her money, the family hasnt been at the coast before,... and then she spends that much money...
I know the critic in my review somehow seems to outshine the beginning, but the story was fun to read and I want to restate that I really enjoyed reading it!
Hey there!
I really liked your story! How you drew out the characters, the plot,...
The thing I stumbled over, was the car Keri got Alex. Maybe its because Im from Europe and a car has somehow a different meaning than in the US... How much do you pay for a car in the US?
Here its not that common to get a car, when you got your drivers license and most of the students - even in university - are taking the bus/train/bike/their own feet. Spending thousands - or even hundreds - of dollars on a birthday present seems way past generosity ans is a little bit exaggerated. It just doesnt seems realistic to me. Keri works two jobs and saves her money, the family hasnt been at the coast before,... and then she spends that much money...
I know the critic in my review somehow seems to outshine the beginning, but the story was fun to read and I want to restate that I really enjoyed reading it!
5/12/2016 c1 Guest
Hey there i know you must be some where else in your own world but I just want to say Thankyou so much for sharing this story with us, you are a great writer, wish you could hve written the sequel of this one tooo, but still love this book so much
Hey there i know you must be some where else in your own world but I just want to say Thankyou so much for sharing this story with us, you are a great writer, wish you could hve written the sequel of this one tooo, but still love this book so much
10/8/2015 c36 Guest
This was so original but thanx a lot cause now lm in love with is the best book lve ever read
This was so original but thanx a lot cause now lm in love with is the best book lve ever read
9/19/2015 c33 Guest
gahhhh give me a chance keri pleaaaaase i was all originally punch alex's lights out but GIVE HIM A CHANCE!
gahhhh give me a chance keri pleaaaaase i was all originally punch alex's lights out but GIVE HIM A CHANCE!
3/27/2015 c36 Guest
This is the single most amazing story I've ever read - off line or not. I fell in love with all the characters, the plot was flawless, it made me laugh and cry and I can't think of anything you could have done to make it better. It really is special.:) This should seriously be a book. I don't know if you're still on here, or even if you'll see this message, but this deserves to be published! It's fucking great! I loved BB part especially. The entire thing was so cute and funny I'll definitely be reading it again and again. I really hope you keep writing, if not now then someday 'cause this was absolutely perfect. And the fact you finished in a few months is absolutely crazy! Wow, I want to thank you so much for that amazing read, and I wish you the best. :)
This is the single most amazing story I've ever read - off line or not. I fell in love with all the characters, the plot was flawless, it made me laugh and cry and I can't think of anything you could have done to make it better. It really is special.:) This should seriously be a book. I don't know if you're still on here, or even if you'll see this message, but this deserves to be published! It's fucking great! I loved BB part especially. The entire thing was so cute and funny I'll definitely be reading it again and again. I really hope you keep writing, if not now then someday 'cause this was absolutely perfect. And the fact you finished in a few months is absolutely crazy! Wow, I want to thank you so much for that amazing read, and I wish you the best. :)
2/13/2015 c36 crazydaisyyy
This was SUCH AN AMAZING STORY! i loved the character developments and the plot and keri and alex are the cutest! :-)
This was SUCH AN AMAZING STORY! i loved the character developments and the plot and keri and alex are the cutest! :-)