for One Gothic Mess8/6/2008 c1 
5Little Apple Red
Chapter was a little short but yet I still enjoyed it and will definately be back to read chapter 2...erm...idk if I'm liking the way you portray the goth girl though or w/e. it's a little too clique for me.
that and i thought it was kind of odd for the teacher to be so terrified of her but yet still give her a punishment...idk. otherwise i think it's cute so far. watch out for small gramatical mistakes. i'm just trying to be helpful.
5Little Apple RedChapter was a little short but yet I still enjoyed it and will definately be back to read chapter 2...erm...idk if I'm liking the way you portray the goth girl though or w/e. it's a little too clique for me.
that and i thought it was kind of odd for the teacher to be so terrified of her but yet still give her a punishment...idk. otherwise i think it's cute so far. watch out for small gramatical mistakes. i'm just trying to be helpful.
8/6/2008 c1 1Account Moved
It sounds like you have personal experience with being gothic. It was very nice. I think, though, that
" …and no, I was simply gone for the holidays…
Holidays? I’m pretty sure that the closest holiday is Christmas and that’s about a month away.
…well us imaginary voices have special holidays and umm…National Chicken Day was yesterday. It’s a very important day to us!"
was a bit much, but all in all, really nice.
1Account MovedIt sounds like you have personal experience with being gothic. It was very nice. I think, though, that
" …and no, I was simply gone for the holidays…
Holidays? I’m pretty sure that the closest holiday is Christmas and that’s about a month away.
…well us imaginary voices have special holidays and umm…National Chicken Day was yesterday. It’s a very important day to us!"
was a bit much, but all in all, really nice.
8/6/2008 c1 Vici Daily
Interdesting verdy interdesting, lol like my accent, well anyways i like this so far and i'm excited to read upcoming chapters when you post them. Keep writing!
angela (i actually 'dont' have an accent but i would love one!) :P
Interdesting verdy interdesting, lol like my accent, well anyways i like this so far and i'm excited to read upcoming chapters when you post them. Keep writing!
angela (i actually 'dont' have an accent but i would love one!) :P