for Knight In Shining Armor2/21/2014 c1 DragonOwl
I really liked that, especially the beginning and the end and, oh, all of it! The knight in shining armour bit was cute too!
I really liked that, especially the beginning and the end and, oh, all of it! The knight in shining armour bit was cute too!
5/30/2011 c1 
16non.graceful
I just put thus as a favorite and then thought 'hey that won't help the person know what I liked exactly'.
So I'll tell you.
I liked that it was short and wasn't the whole 'oh wo is me, he doesn't know me blah blah blah' it was just simple and in a way had a happy ending.
16non.gracefulI just put thus as a favorite and then thought 'hey that won't help the person know what I liked exactly'.
So I'll tell you.
I liked that it was short and wasn't the whole 'oh wo is me, he doesn't know me blah blah blah' it was just simple and in a way had a happy ending.
7/12/2009 c1 9Lily Llynn
One thing: "Boy-with-crooked-grin was sent a helpful grin towards my direction." This was awkwardly worded. I am unsure if she is being grinned at or the one doing the grinning.
However, this was really cute, though I don't think homework is that big of a deal. :P But I did like this. (: I'm very glad xoxluurve added this to our c2.
9Lily LlynnOne thing: "Boy-with-crooked-grin was sent a helpful grin towards my direction." This was awkwardly worded. I am unsure if she is being grinned at or the one doing the grinning.
However, this was really cute, though I don't think homework is that big of a deal. :P But I did like this. (: I'm very glad xoxluurve added this to our c2.
12/30/2008 c1 13blurrylights
I loved this! It was just...good. Tiny things make differences. :) The metaphors worked with this, and it was funny. Nothing I would particularly change. Write more! :)
13blurrylightsI loved this! It was just...good. Tiny things make differences. :) The metaphors worked with this, and it was funny. Nothing I would particularly change. Write more! :)
12/28/2008 c1 3kte-wonderful
Hey! Overall, this story is very cute and "aww" worthy. :) I liked the story line, and it was just humorous enough to be cute.
There were a couple technical things, but they were easy to go over. (If you want to know what those were... in the third line you wrote "lankly", which I think you meant to be "lanky"? Also at one point you mentioned how she wanted to get a "peak" at him, rather than a "peek". Just little things like that. Oh, and "shinning" should be "shining"... but I think you knew that, considering the title. :)) Overall, though, they did nothing to take away from the plot. For me, the beginning was a tad bit choppy and awkward, but it served its purpose in its descriptions. Not really a bad thing, but you might want to work on it a smidge. :)
It was nice and easy to read, and I liked your descriptions and the conversations she had with herself. It was very cute to see her "head in the clouds" attitude sort of thing, and I liked the parallels you made with the whole knight in shining armor idea. :)
kte-wonderful
3kte-wonderfulHey! Overall, this story is very cute and "aww" worthy. :) I liked the story line, and it was just humorous enough to be cute.
There were a couple technical things, but they were easy to go over. (If you want to know what those were... in the third line you wrote "lankly", which I think you meant to be "lanky"? Also at one point you mentioned how she wanted to get a "peak" at him, rather than a "peek". Just little things like that. Oh, and "shinning" should be "shining"... but I think you knew that, considering the title. :)) Overall, though, they did nothing to take away from the plot. For me, the beginning was a tad bit choppy and awkward, but it served its purpose in its descriptions. Not really a bad thing, but you might want to work on it a smidge. :)
It was nice and easy to read, and I liked your descriptions and the conversations she had with herself. It was very cute to see her "head in the clouds" attitude sort of thing, and I liked the parallels you made with the whole knight in shining armor idea. :)
kte-wonderful
10/19/2008 c1 Emily
Aww, that was cute. =]
Aww, that was cute. =]
9/4/2008 c1 1x juneflower
AGH YOU NEVER TOLD ME YOU SUBMITTED SOMETHING. -sobs-
But you cannot hide from me I have found your work YES. IT'S TIME FOR REPAYMENT ONLY I HAVE CLASS IN LIKE 10 MINUTES SO I'LL TYPE SUPERFAST AND HOPE THAT I FINISH UP THIS REVIEW. :)
Okay so anyways. First I have to say that was probably one of the cutest stories I've ever read. I could totally imagine some shy stalker girl and... some cute guy. Cliche but cute, nonetheless. It's not like I totally hate cliche, anyway. OKAY BACK ON TRACK.
Your style really gives this story the feel it deserves. Um, I mean that by... you have a light style and this story is a light story therefore it fits perfectly. It's a nice combination of funny + cute haha. Also your style makes it really easy to picture what's going on. God what a fluffy story, it makes me feel warm inside.
Obviously my reviews are nothing compared to yours and not helpful at all but I GIVE YOU 100 THUMBS UP SO WRITE MORE :Db
1x juneflowerAGH YOU NEVER TOLD ME YOU SUBMITTED SOMETHING. -sobs-
But you cannot hide from me I have found your work YES. IT'S TIME FOR REPAYMENT ONLY I HAVE CLASS IN LIKE 10 MINUTES SO I'LL TYPE SUPERFAST AND HOPE THAT I FINISH UP THIS REVIEW. :)
Okay so anyways. First I have to say that was probably one of the cutest stories I've ever read. I could totally imagine some shy stalker girl and... some cute guy. Cliche but cute, nonetheless. It's not like I totally hate cliche, anyway. OKAY BACK ON TRACK.
Your style really gives this story the feel it deserves. Um, I mean that by... you have a light style and this story is a light story therefore it fits perfectly. It's a nice combination of funny + cute haha. Also your style makes it really easy to picture what's going on. God what a fluffy story, it makes me feel warm inside.
Obviously my reviews are nothing compared to yours and not helpful at all but I GIVE YOU 100 THUMBS UP SO WRITE MORE :Db
8/23/2008 c1 3King Patch
hey you! thank you for reviewing my stuff.. now I get a shot :)
for a first fic, I think you're doing very well. this is short but has enough information about the characters to empathize and gives me that delightful puppy love feeling back which I know from when I was young, innocent and in high school :D
I think that your only problem so far is that you make some funny spelling and grammar booboos. Some writers on this site make so many and so bizarrely that the story becomes unreadable, but yours are fewer and cute so easier to read past. You will lose readers in your title has a mistake tho- "shining" is with one N! If you run your spell check through the story I bet you'll find them. It's basically a matter of rereading your story very closely (and several times if you're neurotic like me:D) to find misses. Practice makes perfect, bla, you know!
Anyway, I hope that didn't feel harsh, I did not aim to hurt your sensibilities or be mean, but I know getting your story scrutinized isn't like eating ice cream.. I hope it was at all helpful! I would definitely read more if you wrote more, so keep it up. The more you write, the more you think like a writer, I think. :D
Cheers~
3King Patchhey you! thank you for reviewing my stuff.. now I get a shot :)
for a first fic, I think you're doing very well. this is short but has enough information about the characters to empathize and gives me that delightful puppy love feeling back which I know from when I was young, innocent and in high school :D
I think that your only problem so far is that you make some funny spelling and grammar booboos. Some writers on this site make so many and so bizarrely that the story becomes unreadable, but yours are fewer and cute so easier to read past. You will lose readers in your title has a mistake tho- "shining" is with one N! If you run your spell check through the story I bet you'll find them. It's basically a matter of rereading your story very closely (and several times if you're neurotic like me:D) to find misses. Practice makes perfect, bla, you know!
Anyway, I hope that didn't feel harsh, I did not aim to hurt your sensibilities or be mean, but I know getting your story scrutinized isn't like eating ice cream.. I hope it was at all helpful! I would definitely read more if you wrote more, so keep it up. The more you write, the more you think like a writer, I think. :D
Cheers~
8/8/2008 c1 ohKAY
Nice job for your first fic!...Seriously, it made me go aw at the end :) The plot was actually different from what I expected. (but not in a bad way) Your writing style sounds EXACTLY the same as the way you talk XDD When I was reading your story I could actually imagine you talking u_u;; Scary right?
I give you points on creativity for sure. Your story like hints/grazes at romance in an incredibly fluffy cute way and and zomigawd I
Nice job for your first fic!...Seriously, it made me go aw at the end :) The plot was actually different from what I expected. (but not in a bad way) Your writing style sounds EXACTLY the same as the way you talk XDD When I was reading your story I could actually imagine you talking u_u;; Scary right?
I give you points on creativity for sure. Your story like hints/grazes at romance in an incredibly fluffy cute way and and zomigawd I