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2/2/2009 c1 1AnotherMaybe321
Oh this was really good, I like how short and to the point it is, because it's easy to relate to, and the emotion is so strong that it makes the piece really worth reading.

The only problem I see in it though is the obscurity, cause it leaves the reader wondering the basic who what where why and how.

However, the writing makes up for that. It's kind of poetic, in a way to me haha :) good one-shot
8/13/2008 c1 123456DoesNotExist
Review Game!

I love the beginning. You don't tell us where she is or where she's going, or what she wants there, and it pulled me in quickly.

It's sad, but it's amazing. There were some bits that were a little fuzzy, but I think that only added to it.

Can't find anything I don't like about it, it's so emotional and powerful - it affected me. I love that you don't go into much about the relationship, it lets the imagination create that.

Great work :)

8/8/2008 c1 9Dot Cubed
I absolutely love this. It was so short but so emotionally heartbreaking at the same time. I felt like I could really feel what your main character was feeling, even if she didn't have a name and I knew her for about two seconds. I just absolutely loved it.

My only problem is I want reasons, darn it! Who broke her heart? Why? Basically, stuff like that. It's more of a personal preference though and not something that you should work in your story by any means, because I think it's perfect as is. As a reader I just want explanations, haha
8/8/2008 c1 4Taijiyah
Very emotional. It's crafted so well, and it makes me wonder quite a bit about what tore them apart...
8/8/2008 c1 11the ignorance of it all
It's quite moving and engaging. It might just be the hour of night it is for me, but the end confused me. Still really liked it, though. =)

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