
3/4 c1 Guest
Well written story. However there is no interesting actions or development. She set the stage to follow up a plot and plot twists. Good as a first chapter but not really a story yet. Needs another chapter.
Well written story. However there is no interesting actions or development. She set the stage to follow up a plot and plot twists. Good as a first chapter but not really a story yet. Needs another chapter.
7/18/2021 c1 Guest
This is such a good short story! Loved how many twists&turns there are! Would suggest to friends and anyone else who likes things like this!
This is such a good short story! Loved how many twists&turns there are! Would suggest to friends and anyone else who likes things like this!
7/1/2020 c1
1LunaLight Fusion Defense
Aww man so sweet.I loved does the female in this story remind me of Marinette from miraculous ladybug for some reason?

Aww man so sweet.I loved does the female in this story remind me of Marinette from miraculous ladybug for some reason?
7/31/2018 c1 Guest
Ahhhh hahaha! This was so adorable! I loved it .
Ahhhh hahaha! This was so adorable! I loved it .
6/18/2018 c1 Angela P. Davin
I laughed the whole time while reading this story. I loved it! Short and to the point; yet funny and very amusing.
I laughed the whole time while reading this story. I loved it! Short and to the point; yet funny and very amusing.
5/5/2018 c1 Guest
GET PLAYED
GET PLAYED
1/25/2018 c1 Guest
Oh heyyyyyyyy, I love that!
Oh heyyyyyyyy, I love that!
11/7/2017 c1 Artly
This is so funny, honest, and sweet. The narrator's voice is strong and personality showing. It is a very enjoyable short.
This is so funny, honest, and sweet. The narrator's voice is strong and personality showing. It is a very enjoyable short.
5/7/2017 c1 Guest
WHAT'S THE MEANING OF THIS? I DON'T GET IT.
'TURN AROUND.'
WHAT'S THE MEANING OF THIS? I DON'T GET IT.
'TURN AROUND.'
12/19/2016 c1 M
I honestly come back to read this every few years because it's really stuck with me. So well written.
I honestly come back to read this every few years because it's really stuck with me. So well written.
12/18/2016 c1 Zantedeschia
OH MY GOD THAT IS SO CUTE OMFG BUT THAT'S THE END?! DAMN IT WAS SOO SWEEEEETTT THO GEEZ HOLY SHIT
OH MY GOD THAT IS SO CUTE OMFG BUT THAT'S THE END?! DAMN IT WAS SOO SWEEEEETTT THO GEEZ HOLY SHIT
11/30/2016 c1 BlackHeron104
No. No. NO. YOUCANTJUSTENDITLIKETHAT! DX *queue to wail of despair
It's so good though! I just wish you would continue it or something...
No. No. NO. YOUCANTJUSTENDITLIKETHAT! DX *queue to wail of despair
It's so good though! I just wish you would continue it or something...
11/28/2016 c1 Guest
hilarious love it. wish there would be a part two
hilarious love it. wish there would be a part two