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12/7/2012 c1 8XxLadyKnightLizxX
Wow... Just wow. This is really deep and so relevant to this day and age when so many people feel like this. It calls towards that darkness towards us all that tells us that no one cares and that we are alone in this world. It's so darkly beautiful and I think the repetition really works in this. Keep up the good and marvellously deep work.

LadyKnight (:
3/28/2009 c1 Isca
"I was in the school bathroom when it happened." This is a very intriguing first line. It sets up the tone of the poem nicely.

"I want help. I'm afraid...that no one cares." This section is particularly honest and introspective. One of the greatest human desires is have someone genuinely care about you. You described that innate desire well here. :)

"I feel faint" and "I hear screams" are lines with an excellent tone-they add such a nice twist to the story.

"Am I gone?" Beautiful ending. It's thought-provoking and full of angst.

Keep up the good work,


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