for Until You Loved Me6/18/2019 c32 Guest
I loved it.
I loved it.
6/15/2015 c32 rAywOLf sHibELt
Love this story so much! Thank so, so much for sharing this. You're awesome!
Love this story so much! Thank so, so much for sharing this. You're awesome!
1/29/2015 c32 aynaarah
..kind of sweet.. at first the big, long paragraphs scared me.. and it was this guy lamenting and.. many aspects were pretty confusing in the fist chapters.. but then I got more comfortable with your writing style or your writing improved and I started to see things.. and I wend on at first because I love your (emo) title.. and the titles of the chapters.. and then I was caught up in your story..
.. you touched some nice points of human friendship, with the strengths and weaknesses of a relationship.. even some religious aspects.. like if you are perceived as different/sinner would you still be welcomed to religious sermons .. and for all I know yes, some God said He came for sinners.. some people learn there to be better, stronger Humans..
..A shortcoming for my taste is not necessarily the way you choose to solve the conflict with over-the-top acts of drama and self-destruction.. that could have resulted in great and irreversible damage but mostly because your characters are kind of one dimension/one direction. In my opinion they have not grown-up and become mature, still vulnerable and defenseless.. I personally don't feel they have built strengths .. it all rather goes where the wind blows ..
Thank you for your story!
..kind of sweet.. at first the big, long paragraphs scared me.. and it was this guy lamenting and.. many aspects were pretty confusing in the fist chapters.. but then I got more comfortable with your writing style or your writing improved and I started to see things.. and I wend on at first because I love your (emo) title.. and the titles of the chapters.. and then I was caught up in your story..
.. you touched some nice points of human friendship, with the strengths and weaknesses of a relationship.. even some religious aspects.. like if you are perceived as different/sinner would you still be welcomed to religious sermons .. and for all I know yes, some God said He came for sinners.. some people learn there to be better, stronger Humans..
..A shortcoming for my taste is not necessarily the way you choose to solve the conflict with over-the-top acts of drama and self-destruction.. that could have resulted in great and irreversible damage but mostly because your characters are kind of one dimension/one direction. In my opinion they have not grown-up and become mature, still vulnerable and defenseless.. I personally don't feel they have built strengths .. it all rather goes where the wind blows ..
Thank you for your story!
12/7/2014 c32 Le Guest
Oh my gosh! I really enjoyed reading this. It was amazingly well written and the boys are gorgeously complicated and complete, hot messes. 3
Oh my gosh! I really enjoyed reading this. It was amazingly well written and the boys are gorgeously complicated and complete, hot messes. 3
12/6/2014 c32 rochitia
ohhh my God, I read this story for hours without stopping, I just COULDN'T stop! It's so beautiful! great work!
ohhh my God, I read this story for hours without stopping, I just COULDN'T stop! It's so beautiful! great work!
11/1/2014 c1 Lovelyou
Aw the lesser than and greater than key doesn't show up in reviews so my previous review will look confusing
Aw the lesser than and greater than key doesn't show up in reviews so my previous review will look confusing
11/1/2014 c32 Lovelyou
I loved this story!
It got better by the time they went to Jake's home. I just love all four of these guys being friends but with all these feelings and secrets and whatnot going around. I've ALWAYS wanted a closed love triangle story (A likes B, B likes C, C likes A). Usually love triangles just stop after the second, but THIS STORY? It was a freaking love square with all these other arrows going on. I drew a kind of map for it. That was great fun to read.
Here's the map I drew:
October -(kissed once?) Declan -(friends sharing kisses)- Jake -(past crush, friends, betrayed, later something like friends)- Leo -(eventually no)-Brie -(past)- Declan (LOVE)- - (eventually) Seth - (past) October - (eventually) -(LOVE) Jake -(love but not IN LOVE) Seth
Oct - Jake
X
Dec - Seth
I loved this story!
It got better by the time they went to Jake's home. I just love all four of these guys being friends but with all these feelings and secrets and whatnot going around. I've ALWAYS wanted a closed love triangle story (A likes B, B likes C, C likes A). Usually love triangles just stop after the second, but THIS STORY? It was a freaking love square with all these other arrows going on. I drew a kind of map for it. That was great fun to read.
Here's the map I drew:
October -(kissed once?) Declan -(friends sharing kisses)- Jake -(past crush, friends, betrayed, later something like friends)- Leo -(eventually no)-Brie -(past)- Declan (LOVE)- - (eventually) Seth - (past) October - (eventually) -(LOVE) Jake -(love but not IN LOVE) Seth
Oct - Jake
X
Dec - Seth
9/18/2014 c32 Drips of blue
Drips of bluegreen turpentine
I still cant get over this story, it comes to my mind all the time and i seriously wish there was more at the same time dont want there to be more because its a wonderful story
Drips of bluegreen turpentine
I still cant get over this story, it comes to my mind all the time and i seriously wish there was more at the same time dont want there to be more because its a wonderful story
8/21/2014 c5 mountainpiling
The narrator is so spoiled :/ He just wants someone perfect who will perfectly understand him and devote themself fully to him and they both would be perfectly fine with each other. If he's so smart then he should realize that he's pretty naive and delusional, because it's not going to help him survive in this world.
The narrator is so spoiled :/ He just wants someone perfect who will perfectly understand him and devote themself fully to him and they both would be perfectly fine with each other. If he's so smart then he should realize that he's pretty naive and delusional, because it's not going to help him survive in this world.
8/11/2014 c32 Guest
I dont know how to really react. I read this story in one night and it was amazing. It really brightened up my day and that ending was one of the sweetest endings I have ever read, I actually cried a little. Ik this is a really old story but I love this story and im really happy I found it. So yea... thank you for writing this story, and this was an amazing story
I dont know how to really react. I read this story in one night and it was amazing. It really brightened up my day and that ending was one of the sweetest endings I have ever read, I actually cried a little. Ik this is a really old story but I love this story and im really happy I found it. So yea... thank you for writing this story, and this was an amazing story
6/11/2014 c32 ajashire1
Oh my *sniff* :')
Brilliant. That was one of the most sweet endings I've ever witnessed. At times this story was filled with so much drama that I sighed in frustration and I can't even count how many times I called the boys idiots. In the end it was worth it though, thank you for the story it was a wonderful read.
Oh my *sniff* :')
Brilliant. That was one of the most sweet endings I've ever witnessed. At times this story was filled with so much drama that I sighed in frustration and I can't even count how many times I called the boys idiots. In the end it was worth it though, thank you for the story it was a wonderful read.
5/27/2014 c32 
2Gummy Kitten
I KNOW.
I know this is really old.
I know the chances that you don't even use whatever e-mail address review alerts are sent to for this account. Or maybe you do. Maybe you're totally active and stuff. I hope so because I am about to salivate all over you and I want you to be present for that.
This story made my entire night. I hate my job, but I need it, I might lose it soon because I'm stupid and spiteful... I have to face all of that tomorrow but tonight I found this. I found this amazing story that made me completely forget about all of it. I read this forever ago, or at least I think I did... all of it is so familiar except I don't remember ever reading a gem like this. I love your characters. I love your love for them and the way you handle them, it's amazing. ...I think I, like Jake, was in love with October from the beginning. You write him as such a mystery, and even without the summary, despite the interest in Declan and the emotional moments with Seth in the beginning, it was easy to tell that October was the important one. ...I find that truly astounding, because toward the beginning he had so little screentime. It was just the way Jake reacted to him in comparison to the others. God I feel stupid because I'm telling you things you already know, you're the genius behind it after all. But like... it was so perfect. By the end of the second chapter I had already forgotten all my "real life" problems and I was able to invest all of my emotions and feelings into these fine characters with their fine developments and all of it was so amazing. It really rocked my world tonight... I got a call from a friend but I had to tell her I couldn't talk because I was drunk on happiness. Which seemed to make her happy too because I've been mad about everything lately. Even now that this is over I still haven't come down from the high it gave me. I'm so not done talking about this.
The ending was beautiful... I was rooting for Seth and Declan, obviously... I think out of everyone's feelings Declan's were the ones that made my soul melt for him. He's just so heart-breakingly in love... I kept trying to think of a more clever way to say "in love" right here but that's the only way I can describe it and that's the best part about you and you're writing. You really give the word "love" meaning with these characters and their feelings. I keep getting off track. Especially in Declan's POV chapter, my world really shattered for him... I'm so psyched that he got his happy ending... I totally expected he would, of course, but that doesn't make it any less exciting that it happened.
...But October... being my favorite character, was my favorite part. Because he didn't change... he didn't have epiphanies or sudden realizations he just made a decision based on everything he couldn't handle already feeling and that was so perfect. He's such a shit, honestly, even in the end, with his "trying" bull, but that's who he is and that's why I love you. You stayed so true to the characters you set up right until the end... you didn't change him to progress the romance, you made it happen by keeping him just the way he is. And Jake made it happen by loving him just the way he is and fuck this really made my night. I love Jake by the way... love him... he's so sweet and even if he over-thinks every. fucking. thing... well, he makes up for it, doesn't he? I think he's actually the real reason October is somehow my favorite. Seeing everything through his eyes and reading this story in his shoes I think I just fell in with his feelings. He might be my actual favorite. I might figure that out when I come down from the high.
Anyway. Anyway. I don't know if you'll get to read this... I just want to thank you for making me so. damn. happy. with these fuckers... I was just totally aimlessly browsing FP I never expected to find something so great. But I guess life has a way of giving us exactly what we need, sometimes. Also, apparently, you do too. You are fucking amazing and I hope you're still writing. I hope you're published and famous and I want to read everything you write ever again.
2Gummy KittenI KNOW.
I know this is really old.
I know the chances that you don't even use whatever e-mail address review alerts are sent to for this account. Or maybe you do. Maybe you're totally active and stuff. I hope so because I am about to salivate all over you and I want you to be present for that.
This story made my entire night. I hate my job, but I need it, I might lose it soon because I'm stupid and spiteful... I have to face all of that tomorrow but tonight I found this. I found this amazing story that made me completely forget about all of it. I read this forever ago, or at least I think I did... all of it is so familiar except I don't remember ever reading a gem like this. I love your characters. I love your love for them and the way you handle them, it's amazing. ...I think I, like Jake, was in love with October from the beginning. You write him as such a mystery, and even without the summary, despite the interest in Declan and the emotional moments with Seth in the beginning, it was easy to tell that October was the important one. ...I find that truly astounding, because toward the beginning he had so little screentime. It was just the way Jake reacted to him in comparison to the others. God I feel stupid because I'm telling you things you already know, you're the genius behind it after all. But like... it was so perfect. By the end of the second chapter I had already forgotten all my "real life" problems and I was able to invest all of my emotions and feelings into these fine characters with their fine developments and all of it was so amazing. It really rocked my world tonight... I got a call from a friend but I had to tell her I couldn't talk because I was drunk on happiness. Which seemed to make her happy too because I've been mad about everything lately. Even now that this is over I still haven't come down from the high it gave me. I'm so not done talking about this.
The ending was beautiful... I was rooting for Seth and Declan, obviously... I think out of everyone's feelings Declan's were the ones that made my soul melt for him. He's just so heart-breakingly in love... I kept trying to think of a more clever way to say "in love" right here but that's the only way I can describe it and that's the best part about you and you're writing. You really give the word "love" meaning with these characters and their feelings. I keep getting off track. Especially in Declan's POV chapter, my world really shattered for him... I'm so psyched that he got his happy ending... I totally expected he would, of course, but that doesn't make it any less exciting that it happened.
...But October... being my favorite character, was my favorite part. Because he didn't change... he didn't have epiphanies or sudden realizations he just made a decision based on everything he couldn't handle already feeling and that was so perfect. He's such a shit, honestly, even in the end, with his "trying" bull, but that's who he is and that's why I love you. You stayed so true to the characters you set up right until the end... you didn't change him to progress the romance, you made it happen by keeping him just the way he is. And Jake made it happen by loving him just the way he is and fuck this really made my night. I love Jake by the way... love him... he's so sweet and even if he over-thinks every. fucking. thing... well, he makes up for it, doesn't he? I think he's actually the real reason October is somehow my favorite. Seeing everything through his eyes and reading this story in his shoes I think I just fell in with his feelings. He might be my actual favorite. I might figure that out when I come down from the high.
Anyway. Anyway. I don't know if you'll get to read this... I just want to thank you for making me so. damn. happy. with these fuckers... I was just totally aimlessly browsing FP I never expected to find something so great. But I guess life has a way of giving us exactly what we need, sometimes. Also, apparently, you do too. You are fucking amazing and I hope you're still writing. I hope you're published and famous and I want to read everything you write ever again.
5/6/2014 c5 1PoppingPringle
I LOVE THIS BOOK! THE FIRST CHAPTER OR TWO WERE LIKE #CONFUSING BUT NOW I'M ADDICTED! DEATH OF A SALESMAN IS A VERY GOOD BOOK- SHUT UP JAKE.
1PoppingPringleI LOVE THIS BOOK! THE FIRST CHAPTER OR TWO WERE LIKE #CONFUSING BUT NOW I'M ADDICTED! DEATH OF A SALESMAN IS A VERY GOOD BOOK- SHUT UP JAKE.