for Lillian10/12/2008 c14 
8MidnightSeaNymph
er... That was an interesting end? Does that have it's own story?
The only complaint (or perhaps, more appropriately, constructive criticism) I have is that the story moved very fast. It was almost surreal.
8MidnightSeaNympher... That was an interesting end? Does that have it's own story?
The only complaint (or perhaps, more appropriately, constructive criticism) I have is that the story moved very fast. It was almost surreal.
9/21/2008 c14 mystic.fox
Oh wow, did not expect that to happen in the end. This was a good story and I enjoyed it :)
Oh wow, did not expect that to happen in the end. This was a good story and I enjoyed it :)
8/20/2008 c8 mystic.fox
I hope Josiah finds her soon because he seems like he is truly in love with Lillian. Update soon.
I hope Josiah finds her soon because he seems like he is truly in love with Lillian. Update soon.
8/13/2008 c2 3write-the-world
I really like this story so far. Your style of writing is great; the descriptions (of the town and of Lillian) are awesome; the dynamics between Lillian and Joseph are perfect. I also love Joseph's voice; he's an interesting narrarator so far. I'll definitely be reading more, so please update soon.
3write-the-worldI really like this story so far. Your style of writing is great; the descriptions (of the town and of Lillian) are awesome; the dynamics between Lillian and Joseph are perfect. I also love Joseph's voice; he's an interesting narrarator so far. I'll definitely be reading more, so please update soon.
8/13/2008 c1 J.S. Halloway
You are a decent writer, but I can't help but think that the storyline is stale and the dialogue is quite trite.
I think you would be more successfull if you wrote something more interesting that called for great description.(for you describe things quite lovely.)
You are a decent writer, but I can't help but think that the storyline is stale and the dialogue is quite trite.
I think you would be more successfull if you wrote something more interesting that called for great description.(for you describe things quite lovely.)