for The Curtain5/5/2011 c1 tater748
Very beautiful and true. Although I do enjoy time travel stories, I know they are based on the idea of having a "do over" to fix something. All we have is today, and being overly concerned with the past is counterproductive, at best. Thanks for the poem.
Very beautiful and true. Although I do enjoy time travel stories, I know they are based on the idea of having a "do over" to fix something. All we have is today, and being overly concerned with the past is counterproductive, at best. Thanks for the poem.
5/9/2010 c1 Arista Everett June
This poem is amazing...never thought of time and a curtain to describe each other. Very deep. I like, I like, I like. :)
This poem is amazing...never thought of time and a curtain to describe each other. Very deep. I like, I like, I like. :)
10/18/2008 c1 The.Wizard.Pen.Dragon
This was a great new idea to tell this story and I think that the creative imagery and the AWESOME rhyme scheme you came up with really helped to to sound like some ancient poem or riddle. GREAT JOB!
Write on!
Pen.Dragon
This was a great new idea to tell this story and I think that the creative imagery and the AWESOME rhyme scheme you came up with really helped to to sound like some ancient poem or riddle. GREAT JOB!
Write on!
Pen.Dragon
8/17/2008 c1 
18Lime-Cat
I really like your use the analogy of a curtain to describe history - I think it's very original.
I also like the tone that you have to this piece because it sounds almost like a riddle - very neat effect. This poem also has a sort of omniscient tone to it - it's lovely.
"To cords of time I am held fast;" - Wow! I never thought to compare cords to time, but it really does make a lot of sense since the cords are used to hold up curtains much like how history will pause if time stops. This line is very interesting and unique.
I found the ending to be a little bit sad because of the realization that time can never be stopped. =(
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18Lime-CatI really like your use the analogy of a curtain to describe history - I think it's very original.
I also like the tone that you have to this piece because it sounds almost like a riddle - very neat effect. This poem also has a sort of omniscient tone to it - it's lovely.
"To cords of time I am held fast;" - Wow! I never thought to compare cords to time, but it really does make a lot of sense since the cords are used to hold up curtains much like how history will pause if time stops. This line is very interesting and unique.
I found the ending to be a little bit sad because of the realization that time can never be stopped. =(
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