for Wishing Dream8/15/2008 c1 
10Koki Enwai
Overall, this was really good. I liked the way it turned out.
There were some grammar errors, though, such as missing commas. Also, when writing dialogue it goes like ["Hi," she said."] and not ["Hi." She said.].
Aside from that, it was pretty darn awesome.
- Koki
10Koki EnwaiOverall, this was really good. I liked the way it turned out.
There were some grammar errors, though, such as missing commas. Also, when writing dialogue it goes like ["Hi," she said."] and not ["Hi." She said.].
Aside from that, it was pretty darn awesome.
- Koki