for Everest on Fire11/11/2008 c1 
612simpleplan13
A review from the Review Game on its first birthday to thank you for being a part of the community.
“And a fiery halo flickered”… flickering would work better with proclaiming also it would keep it as one sentence
“From the top that pale golden orb”…I didn’t like how you reused that phrase, I’m sure you could come up with a different, but just as great image
I like how you did the pronunciation at the end, it helped but I would do it for Sargarmartha and Chomulunga as well since I had no idea how to say those.
I liked the piece you descriptions were really great and I liked what you were describing as well, it was interesting.
612simpleplan13A review from the Review Game on its first birthday to thank you for being a part of the community.
“And a fiery halo flickered”… flickering would work better with proclaiming also it would keep it as one sentence
“From the top that pale golden orb”…I didn’t like how you reused that phrase, I’m sure you could come up with a different, but just as great image
I like how you did the pronunciation at the end, it helped but I would do it for Sargarmartha and Chomulunga as well since I had no idea how to say those.
I liked the piece you descriptions were really great and I liked what you were describing as well, it was interesting.
11/6/2008 c1 2dragonflydreamer
Freebie review! :D
I really like your idea here. I found it interesting how you worked from the beauty aspect of fire instead of it's usual negative meaning. It was very creative and refreshing to read.
On a similar note, I like your last line. It really demonstrates your meaning and wraps this up nicely.
The only thing I didn't like was that you used "orb" twice in the first stanza. It's used so closely together that it sounds strange. That could just be my opinion, though.
Very nice poem!
2dragonflydreamerFreebie review! :D
I really like your idea here. I found it interesting how you worked from the beauty aspect of fire instead of it's usual negative meaning. It was very creative and refreshing to read.
On a similar note, I like your last line. It really demonstrates your meaning and wraps this up nicely.
The only thing I didn't like was that you used "orb" twice in the first stanza. It's used so closely together that it sounds strange. That could just be my opinion, though.
Very nice poem!
10/8/2008 c1 11Z451
Simply magnificent in the ways you describe the moutain at dawn just simply perfect.
11Z451Simply magnificent in the ways you describe the moutain at dawn just simply perfect.
9/20/2008 c1 Kit
I'm not one for poetry, but "fiery halo flickered" brought a wonderful image to mind.
I'm not one for poetry, but "fiery halo flickered" brought a wonderful image to mind.
9/1/2008 c1 Ernest Bloom
get single spacing using shift-enter combination.
this is a big panoramic picture; i prefer switching to the macro lens. show us tiny close-up particular details; not "awesome mountain ranges."
my opinion. luck.
get single spacing using shift-enter combination.
this is a big panoramic picture; i prefer switching to the macro lens. show us tiny close-up particular details; not "awesome mountain ranges."
my opinion. luck.