for Fractured Mirror9/3/2008 c1 
612simpleplan13
"You will I know, I know you will"... I didn't like this line, it sounded a bit awkward to me.
"Smile now mirror, No one can know"... seemed weird that you capitalized No one.
I do like the piece, it is different for you, but I like that. It's really powerful and your descriptions are interesting. I also like the rhyming, it's subtle, which works really well in the piece. Great job.
612simpleplan13"You will I know, I know you will"... I didn't like this line, it sounded a bit awkward to me.
"Smile now mirror, No one can know"... seemed weird that you capitalized No one.
I do like the piece, it is different for you, but I like that. It's really powerful and your descriptions are interesting. I also like the rhyming, it's subtle, which works really well in the piece. Great job.