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9/3/2008 c1 612simpleplan13
"You will I know, I know you will"... I didn't like this line, it sounded a bit awkward to me.

"Smile now mirror, No one can know"... seemed weird that you capitalized No one.

I do like the piece, it is different for you, but I like that. It's really powerful and your descriptions are interesting. I also like the rhyming, it's subtle, which works really well in the piece. Great job.
8/26/2008 c1 15Scarlett Wynter
wow, this is dark. It's a really well written poem though.

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