for Rising Dragons8/14/2011 c2 
1cjlikewae
So far, I'm pretty much enjoying the story. It's pretty good and I'll definately keep reading it. There was just one thing that kept catching my attention up to this point. When you write from the point of view of more than one person, you have to make it clear when the POV is changing. It doesn't have to be anything special, it can be something like three centered asterisks, a dotted line, or even an extra space or two. Other than the unclear transitions, the story is good so far. Keep writing.
1cjlikewaeSo far, I'm pretty much enjoying the story. It's pretty good and I'll definately keep reading it. There was just one thing that kept catching my attention up to this point. When you write from the point of view of more than one person, you have to make it clear when the POV is changing. It doesn't have to be anything special, it can be something like three centered asterisks, a dotted line, or even an extra space or two. Other than the unclear transitions, the story is good so far. Keep writing.
8/28/2010 c3 4PadlockLOL
he shouldn't of lied 2 her he could of say he is a musician or sum fink coz wat if she fines out nd their relationship gos a bit deeper she'll probably feel hurt nd about the children like the names it was funny nd having the feeling being watched its kinda creepy u know. OO nd we cnt 4 get wat Chung-Hee sais was funny i kept readinf it over bout 3-4 times XD nd really i dnt fink Ryan means it coz fink bout it if u like sum 1 witch Ryan clearly does u cnt help doing sum fink bout it nd + we all now sum fink is gonna happen i cnt wait 4 the next chapter 2 be update plz update cnt XD
4PadlockLOLhe shouldn't of lied 2 her he could of say he is a musician or sum fink coz wat if she fines out nd their relationship gos a bit deeper she'll probably feel hurt nd about the children like the names it was funny nd having the feeling being watched its kinda creepy u know. OO nd we cnt 4 get wat Chung-Hee sais was funny i kept readinf it over bout 3-4 times XD nd really i dnt fink Ryan means it coz fink bout it if u like sum 1 witch Ryan clearly does u cnt help doing sum fink bout it nd + we all now sum fink is gonna happen i cnt wait 4 the next chapter 2 be update plz update cnt XD
8/28/2010 c2 PadlockLOL
omg giving her a ride i wonder how thats gonna play out ? nd can i just say meeting at the bus stop was a gd idea coz most times people meet at a bus stop 4 a second time i wonder 4 the third time he meets her at her work place with the rest of the band? that probably be DRAMA or when she excepts her friends offer 4 modeling just 4 the day nd she gets to model with the boyz nd she fines out ? or maybe the first 1 wat i suggested but her friend it there? anyway i dnt know but i cant wait 4 more updates on this so plz update XD
omg giving her a ride i wonder how thats gonna play out ? nd can i just say meeting at the bus stop was a gd idea coz most times people meet at a bus stop 4 a second time i wonder 4 the third time he meets her at her work place with the rest of the band? that probably be DRAMA or when she excepts her friends offer 4 modeling just 4 the day nd she gets to model with the boyz nd she fines out ? or maybe the first 1 wat i suggested but her friend it there? anyway i dnt know but i cant wait 4 more updates on this so plz update XD
8/28/2010 c1 PadlockLOL
i like how they meet 4 the very 1st time nd the in the end he doesn't ask 4 her number or any thing oh PS i've seen the video of the title of this story nd can i just say love it nd the song wat was playing it went well wiv it :) i cnt wait 4 more update XD plz update more soon
i like how they meet 4 the very 1st time nd the in the end he doesn't ask 4 her number or any thing oh PS i've seen the video of the title of this story nd can i just say love it nd the song wat was playing it went well wiv it :) i cnt wait 4 more update XD plz update more soon
11/6/2009 c3 1igot4
Liking this so far hope you come back and give us an update waiting for their third meeting its fate:)
1igot4Liking this so far hope you come back and give us an update waiting for their third meeting its fate:)
3/28/2009 c2 EdwardISLestat
Okay
Nice so far. Gr Sage is pissing me off. Looking forward to continuing this
Okay
Nice so far. Gr Sage is pissing me off. Looking forward to continuing this
1/6/2009 c3 aquarebel90
I really love this story! All you have really are a few grammatical mistakes but they are no really biggie. Keep the story going! I love it!
I really love this story! All you have really are a few grammatical mistakes but they are no really biggie. Keep the story going! I love it!
10/19/2008 c2 5SensuallyPassionate
I like how you incooperate all your stories in each one. They seem to fit and flow well. I would love an update
5SensuallyPassionateI like how you incooperate all your stories in each one. They seem to fit and flow well. I would love an update
10/6/2008 c2 1Disturbed-Individual
Awesome how you included elements from your other two stories, Mr. Ki and Sexy. Very nice. Anyways, this is yet another awesomely plotted? If I can use such terms, story. Really like the way this is going. I hope the females have visible personality differences as the story goes on, you know make Serena, Devon, and Darien three different characters, rather than one character with different names that seems to exist in three different stories.
1Disturbed-IndividualAwesome how you included elements from your other two stories, Mr. Ki and Sexy. Very nice. Anyways, this is yet another awesomely plotted? If I can use such terms, story. Really like the way this is going. I hope the females have visible personality differences as the story goes on, you know make Serena, Devon, and Darien three different characters, rather than one character with different names that seems to exist in three different stories.
9/14/2008 c1 1Chen Cheng Moa
Hello, and I think it is healthy to say I am so going to be your rival XD. But I did notice a few mistakes in the first and second chapters. Nothing all that big, just some misspellings. And some where on FictionPress they need to have some kind of symbol to help separate the sections for cut scenes. (like a line or '~' that. ) Anyway, I loved the story. I am a Chung-Hee fan already! I will wait on the next chapter.
Your new Rival, (In a friendly competitive way)
Chen Cheng Moa-
1Chen Cheng MoaHello, and I think it is healthy to say I am so going to be your rival XD. But I did notice a few mistakes in the first and second chapters. Nothing all that big, just some misspellings. And some where on FictionPress they need to have some kind of symbol to help separate the sections for cut scenes. (like a line or '~' that. ) Anyway, I loved the story. I am a Chung-Hee fan already! I will wait on the next chapter.
Your new Rival, (In a friendly competitive way)
Chen Cheng Moa-
9/10/2008 c2 AMM3485
Awesome chapter. I thought you did an awesome job and I can't wait for the next chapter!
Awesome chapter. I thought you did an awesome job and I can't wait for the next chapter!