for I know I hate10/19/2008 c1 
8Written
very bitter, but strong piece. good job with keeping it emotional but also not losing its sharpness!
8Writtenvery bitter, but strong piece. good job with keeping it emotional but also not losing its sharpness!
9/7/2008 c1 64fatbird33
i liked the lines, "But now i have a reason to exist and now it's not longer just you." awesomeness!
i also liked the lines "i hope that hima nd you kill each other like you always do." it really gets across the point of what a total biatch the girl is.
nice song. keep it up:)
64fatbird33i liked the lines, "But now i have a reason to exist and now it's not longer just you." awesomeness!
i also liked the lines "i hope that hima nd you kill each other like you always do." it really gets across the point of what a total biatch the girl is.
nice song. keep it up:)
8/20/2008 c1 48underneaththesmile
cool poem/song thing man. the girl sounds like a (forgive my language) bitch just leaving you like that. You got the chorus just right too.
"I felt the way you looked at me and knew the lies you breathed
But I thought that if I could somehow show you how much I loved you
You could think differently
But no, I know now that you would always just kill me by
Always in my head." I really loved that...we always try and find a way to fix things, and we KNOW when we're doing our best, but it's just a stab in the back when they aren't paying attention to it. It reminds me of another poem called "Hate, More Powerful Than Love". Awesome job. and to answer your question, S.D.? I live in the beautiful city of Chicago.
48underneaththesmilecool poem/song thing man. the girl sounds like a (forgive my language) bitch just leaving you like that. You got the chorus just right too.
"I felt the way you looked at me and knew the lies you breathed
But I thought that if I could somehow show you how much I loved you
You could think differently
But no, I know now that you would always just kill me by
Always in my head." I really loved that...we always try and find a way to fix things, and we KNOW when we're doing our best, but it's just a stab in the back when they aren't paying attention to it. It reminds me of another poem called "Hate, More Powerful Than Love". Awesome job. and to answer your question, S.D.? I live in the beautiful city of Chicago.