for Firerain8/20/2008 c1 
11Z451
Sorry about the confusion this is actually going to be a super hero story, the first chapter just adds a beginning and points out Rodlin is normal, soon you'll see a villion, the Rodlin's abilities and a true conflict.
11Z451Sorry about the confusion this is actually going to be a super hero story, the first chapter just adds a beginning and points out Rodlin is normal, soon you'll see a villion, the Rodlin's abilities and a true conflict.
8/20/2008 c1 9intensity
The simplicity of your story is nice, not to get bogged down with too many details. You do have a number of spelling errors though. "differrent" is spelled "different". I would put this document through a spell check and it would improve it. Also, what makes a story great is having some sort of conflict. There really is no conflict or struggle during the story. Perhaps, having him working long hours makes him sick from exhaustion, but he works through it and becomes a sculptor in the end. Hope this helps :)
9intensityThe simplicity of your story is nice, not to get bogged down with too many details. You do have a number of spelling errors though. "differrent" is spelled "different". I would put this document through a spell check and it would improve it. Also, what makes a story great is having some sort of conflict. There really is no conflict or struggle during the story. Perhaps, having him working long hours makes him sick from exhaustion, but he works through it and becomes a sculptor in the end. Hope this helps :)