for You, Me, Them, Us9/29/2010 c26 SoDivine
Hey...this story started out to great...everything seemed realistic enough...except for the last part.In real life, moms that abandon their children in favor of another man aren't forgiven that easily...or even given a chance to redeem themselves so soon..I'd know all about it.
So yeah, I basically hated her mom and how Jude's character just tried to justify what she did. In my opinion, if a woman who's already a mother has trouble with her husband should just suck it up. Find alternatives that would benefit both parties, not just her. So yeah, I really hated that Jude tried to justify it by making it seem like she was a "good person" for just going all "I cant stand my life, I need to get away from everyone so I'll just go to my lover's house to relax for a while"
I'm not saying that doesn't happen...but what I mean is...those type of mistakes are RARELY forgiven in real life...
Anyways, back to the story..it was good..until the last part. But it's ok...
Hey...this story started out to great...everything seemed realistic enough...except for the last part.In real life, moms that abandon their children in favor of another man aren't forgiven that easily...or even given a chance to redeem themselves so soon..I'd know all about it.
So yeah, I basically hated her mom and how Jude's character just tried to justify what she did. In my opinion, if a woman who's already a mother has trouble with her husband should just suck it up. Find alternatives that would benefit both parties, not just her. So yeah, I really hated that Jude tried to justify it by making it seem like she was a "good person" for just going all "I cant stand my life, I need to get away from everyone so I'll just go to my lover's house to relax for a while"
I'm not saying that doesn't happen...but what I mean is...those type of mistakes are RARELY forgiven in real life...
Anyways, back to the story..it was good..until the last part. But it's ok...
5/9/2010 c26 
17TaylorNamen
Ok, First Off I want to say i've been reading thos story for about 5 hours straight. And I am regretting being a slow reader.
I really liked the twists you put in there and how each character did have a flaw,
it makes them more real.
And all around it was a great story.
The Aussie slang terms at the bottom were really helpful btw.
And now that its 3:30 in the moring here I'm off to bed.
Cute ending too.
I liked Jude. =]]
17TaylorNamenOk, First Off I want to say i've been reading thos story for about 5 hours straight. And I am regretting being a slow reader.
I really liked the twists you put in there and how each character did have a flaw,
it makes them more real.
And all around it was a great story.
The Aussie slang terms at the bottom were really helpful btw.
And now that its 3:30 in the moring here I'm off to bed.
Cute ending too.
I liked Jude. =]]
1/18/2010 c1 aquintessence
I just read through your entire story and I wanted to say that I love it. I love how the story is so incredibly mature and the fact that Kee isn't perfect- she was really really irritating for most parts actually hahah- just makes it all the more believable. I think that's the part about your story I liked best, the realism because all the characters are flawed.
I hope you keep writing because I think you're really gifted and I hope to read more of your stuff soon.
: )
I just read through your entire story and I wanted to say that I love it. I love how the story is so incredibly mature and the fact that Kee isn't perfect- she was really really irritating for most parts actually hahah- just makes it all the more believable. I think that's the part about your story I liked best, the realism because all the characters are flawed.
I hope you keep writing because I think you're really gifted and I hope to read more of your stuff soon.
: )
11/23/2009 c26 5silentsound
So, I was wandering through profiles on FP, and I came upon yours and realized I had actually read this story, and not reviewed it. Which may not seem all that important, except that I usually review stories that I enjoyed.
Nice work. Sometimes its really hard for writers to put reality down on paper cause we love living in the unreality so much more. So, for what its worth, I commend you for being brave enough to write about something real instead of something fantastical.
Even though, if you ask me, real life is so much for fantastic than our fantasies.
Anyway, I truly enjoyed your style and voice and characters and pretty much everything. Thank you.
5silentsoundSo, I was wandering through profiles on FP, and I came upon yours and realized I had actually read this story, and not reviewed it. Which may not seem all that important, except that I usually review stories that I enjoyed.
Nice work. Sometimes its really hard for writers to put reality down on paper cause we love living in the unreality so much more. So, for what its worth, I commend you for being brave enough to write about something real instead of something fantastical.
Even though, if you ask me, real life is so much for fantastic than our fantasies.
Anyway, I truly enjoyed your style and voice and characters and pretty much everything. Thank you.
11/11/2009 c26 2renegade01
wow...that was awesome.
a lot of their problems just seemed like problems everyone has at some point but the way you portrayed it added a lot of depth and emotion. i couldn't stop reading. i love how you've wrapped it up so that they've addressed the situation even though its not perfect, its realistic. jude is an awesome name. kee is one heck of a character and tyler is just adorable.
beautifully done. ;)
2renegade01wow...that was awesome.
a lot of their problems just seemed like problems everyone has at some point but the way you portrayed it added a lot of depth and emotion. i couldn't stop reading. i love how you've wrapped it up so that they've addressed the situation even though its not perfect, its realistic. jude is an awesome name. kee is one heck of a character and tyler is just adorable.
beautifully done. ;)
11/10/2009 c26 5christinaxxyo
I thought you did an amazing job with this. It had a long of Australian slang (I guess that's what it could be called) that I thought was pretty cool since I never heard/read them before. My only complain about this story is Kee because she really pissed me off some times. It's nothing against your writing, just that her character annoyed the shit out of me at times! You seriously did an amazing job with this story :D
5christinaxxyoI thought you did an amazing job with this. It had a long of Australian slang (I guess that's what it could be called) that I thought was pretty cool since I never heard/read them before. My only complain about this story is Kee because she really pissed me off some times. It's nothing against your writing, just that her character annoyed the shit out of me at times! You seriously did an amazing job with this story :D
11/8/2009 c1 christinaxxyo
I understand that this is an excerpt but I'm still really confused with everything. Hopefully as the story continues, I'll be able to comprehend more of what's going on. I really like your writing style and I have a feeling this story is going to be a good one :)
I understand that this is an excerpt but I'm still really confused with everything. Hopefully as the story continues, I'll be able to comprehend more of what's going on. I really like your writing style and I have a feeling this story is going to be a good one :)
8/11/2009 c25 Audra Hornaday
Hey! I definitely have not forgotten what was going on in the story! You're story is very unique and quite unforgettable. I loved all your well rounded characters and the growth they underwent. I can't wait to read the epilogue and any other stories you may write.
Hey! I definitely have not forgotten what was going on in the story! You're story is very unique and quite unforgettable. I loved all your well rounded characters and the growth they underwent. I can't wait to read the epilogue and any other stories you may write.
8/6/2009 c25 belle1220
I've read the whole thing - as you know - and sometimes it was really hard (read impossible) to feel sorry for Keeson, to understand where she was coming from. The chip on her shoulder was so large that it overshadowed what you were trying to get across.
I really hated her mother. From being such a weak woman in the beginning to becoming a mother who just ups and leaves her children for another man. Her mother disgusts me and if Keeson doesn't forgive her I wouldn't blame her.
Jude was great! A wonderful addition to the story and brought out a new side to Keeson. I wish you would have spent more time on developing their relationship.
Overall, I enjoyed the story, but those are the things that stuck with me. I hope you continue to write!
I've read the whole thing - as you know - and sometimes it was really hard (read impossible) to feel sorry for Keeson, to understand where she was coming from. The chip on her shoulder was so large that it overshadowed what you were trying to get across.
I really hated her mother. From being such a weak woman in the beginning to becoming a mother who just ups and leaves her children for another man. Her mother disgusts me and if Keeson doesn't forgive her I wouldn't blame her.
Jude was great! A wonderful addition to the story and brought out a new side to Keeson. I wish you would have spent more time on developing their relationship.
Overall, I enjoyed the story, but those are the things that stuck with me. I hope you continue to write!
6/10/2009 c18 2Ponder000
dont get why Jude is annoyed! I root for Kee, i mean his friends are rude and nosey.. and poor tyler, hes so cute but mistreated =(
2Ponder000dont get why Jude is annoyed! I root for Kee, i mean his friends are rude and nosey.. and poor tyler, hes so cute but mistreated =(
5/30/2009 c23 belle1220
Not really my favorite chapter. I hate how bitchy Keenson can be at times, especially to her father. I'm not really keen on her forgiving her mother either.
P.S. I missed Jude. I think he needs to be a staple from here on out ;)
Not really my favorite chapter. I hate how bitchy Keenson can be at times, especially to her father. I'm not really keen on her forgiving her mother either.
P.S. I missed Jude. I think he needs to be a staple from here on out ;)
5/4/2009 c22 5silentsound
This is beautiful.
Although I hated Kee at first, she's growing on me. And that was meant as a compliment. The fact that you could make her hateable was proof enough that you are a good writer.
Keep up the good work.
5silentsoundThis is beautiful.
Although I hated Kee at first, she's growing on me. And that was meant as a compliment. The fact that you could make her hateable was proof enough that you are a good writer.
Keep up the good work.
5/3/2009 c9 silentsound
Hey, this is odd for me because I don't usually review, which is totally hypocritical of me but whatever...
I just wanted to say that I also loved this chapter. Your character development is amazing, and I'm hyper aware of characters because its about the only thing I'm good at.
Honestly, your plot is a little along the lines of many other stories, but you've done something different with it, and I'm very glad I'm reading it.
Excellent job.
Hey, this is odd for me because I don't usually review, which is totally hypocritical of me but whatever...
I just wanted to say that I also loved this chapter. Your character development is amazing, and I'm hyper aware of characters because its about the only thing I'm good at.
Honestly, your plot is a little along the lines of many other stories, but you've done something different with it, and I'm very glad I'm reading it.
Excellent job.
5/1/2009 c22 belle1220
I am really a big fan of your story. I am flabbergasted as to why you do not have more reviews.
This chapter was great. I'm going to have to agree with you and say it's one of my favorites too. I'm glad to see Jude and Keesan back together. I heart them :)
I am really a big fan of your story. I am flabbergasted as to why you do not have more reviews.
This chapter was great. I'm going to have to agree with you and say it's one of my favorites too. I'm glad to see Jude and Keesan back together. I heart them :)
4/13/2009 c9 8Le Meg
Somebody suggested this story to me and I'm glad they did - so far so good! It's much darker than your usual FP romance story, which is kind of refreshing in an odd way, and though Keeson isn't exactly likeable at this point, I can't say I wouldn't do the same in such a situation. I'm really interested to see her progression especially, what makes or breaks her, how it all goes down...
Kudos! I'll be back. ;]
8Le MegSomebody suggested this story to me and I'm glad they did - so far so good! It's much darker than your usual FP romance story, which is kind of refreshing in an odd way, and though Keeson isn't exactly likeable at this point, I can't say I wouldn't do the same in such a situation. I'm really interested to see her progression especially, what makes or breaks her, how it all goes down...
Kudos! I'll be back. ;]