9/6/2010 c21 Dwindling Fire
I LOVE THIS! :OO please say its not the heart! .

9/6/2010 c9 Dwindling Fire
dude, it's SO not her! it's gonna be that Kendra chick or something! uggh, I hate it when things like this happen .

8/22/2010 c17 HideAndGoSeek
hey um. I'm gunna keep reading but I REALLY needed to say this. Competitive swimming is my sport. I live off it and that's not how a swim meat would start...

1 are warm-ups

2 the Medly Relay is first which is 4 people at the start. the official will say "first swimmers step in the water" and the first person will do so. The official says "swimmers place your feet. take your mark" and beep the starting noise. Sometimes its a gun but doesn't matter. (for a race that doesn't start with backstroke the official will say "swimmer step up, take your mark" BEEP)

3 the first swimming will swim backstroke to the other side do a flip underwater and swim backstroke all the way back while the second swimmer steps up on the starting block and when the backstroker touched the wall, they'll dive off and swim breaststroke there, touch the wall, turn, then swim it back. (no underwater flips, you'd get disqualified)

when they touch the wall the third swimmer will dive off the block and do butterfly to the wall, touch, turn, and swim back (no flips underwater-you'd get disqualified). When they touch the wall, the fourth and last swimmer dives in and does freestyle to the wall and does a flip turn (underwater) and swims back where he touches a pad on the wall in the water that records the time of his lane's race on the big screen where everyone can see the times of everyone's races. And the freestyler would stay in the water until everyone is done then the official will say "swimmers clear the pool" Everyone who swam the relay would stay there until they have to clear the pool then they MIGHT have gone in the locker room but I see no point in that since he would cheer for the rest of his team.

And the girls swim the relay first then the boys do and so on for every event. And no one is allowed on the deck (around the pool) unless they're a swimmer, coach, or official.

Sorry, didn't mean to trash your story but I needed to say that because as a swimmer it sounded ridiculous.

And I have my own try-outs today for a really hard team to get onto and I'm buggin out about swimming.

I'm gunna keep reading!

HGS

8/18/2010 c6 2LibiLoves
I'm really loving this so far!

Ah the tension! Why did Jason have to ruin the moment?

7/7/2010 c27 7Faye Night
I can't do a long review because my dad's on my case to go to sleep. But I just want to tell you how AMAZING your story is. I've spent the last 2 to 3 days trying to find time to read it. I couldn't stop. I can't help it, I'm a romantic, and your story was just so great. I guess you finished it in 2009 but my sister found your story and recommended I read it. I'm so glad I did. I keep searchimg for that thing called love in real life, but till I find it, stories help me through just like they help me with everything else. And your story definitely gives me hope that there actually is something called love in the world. I just wanted to tell you that it's great and now I'm reading "The Vow" and "I Love Arrogance". Keep writing - You're really good.

6/25/2010 c27 2PrettyInPink001
Aww, this story was so amazing! I loved every single aspect in it, and you're a wonderful writer. You create outstanding stories, and you write Twilight Fanfiction! And if I'm not mistaken, you're Team Edward too! I think I might add you to my Favorite Author's list just becauase of all that. You did an amazing job on the story.

NOW PLEASE, PLEASE, CHECK OUT MY STORY! It's called California Girls, I promise you won't be disappointed!

6/23/2010 c9 5lari223
psst, is the girl jason likes the kendra girl? wait, don't tell me! let me read it out.